Ability Approval I

[Beatrix III]

Ability purchases through the form system will be posted here. When your purchase has been approved by staff, we'll just edit in a line stating approval, so look for that, rather than a reply. You will then be free to purchase it. If you have questions or concerns please make a thread in the Help and Updates forum using the Question prefix.

Thank you.

 

[Yuuka Kazami]

User name: Okina Matara

Name of Ability?
Bamboo Spear (Mai)

Ability Effects:
Damage 1

Range: Close

Duration: Instant

Negative Modifiers: Removable

Descriptor: Mai is armed with an approximately 4 foot long spear made of sharpened bamboo. There's nothing really special about it, other than that it's pointy and stabs things.

Essence Cost: 50

Jeff Edit: Approved!

 

[Jak]

User name: Jak

Name of Ability?
Light Jak// Light Regeneration

Ability Effects:
Level 2 Healing (200 Essence)
(-50 finite)

Descriptor: Light Jak can heal wounds on Jak that enemies cause.

Essence Cost: 350

Jeff Edit: In which ways is this Finite? Needs more description. When describing, try to cover the technical side (how it works) and the visual side (what it looks like).

 

[Sigmund Vrell]

User name: Sigmund Vrell

Name of Ability?
Varmnn's mercy

Ability Effects:
Adaptation 2

Incredible Heat Environments (100)
Incredible Cold Environments (100)

Descriptor: The God of heat smiles upon Sigmund, shielding him from both natural heat and cold.

Essence Cost: 200

<Edit for Approval>

 

[Ricter]

User name: Ricter

Name of Ability?
Healing Donuts

Ability Effects:
Healing [Rank 5] + 1000, Starvation and Thirst + 50
Activation [Rank 5] – 250, Removable [Rank 5] – 250, Finite [Rank 5] – 250, Limited [Rank 5] - 250

Descriptor: Combining culinary skill, alchemy, and healing magics Ricter can bake special donuts that when eaten recovers the health of the target. One bite from the donuts can sustain a person of the need for food and drink for one day, eating the whole thing expands that to three days. With minor enchantments on the treats, no matter how they look, when eaten they taste delicious and offer a rejuvenating energy packed sensation when ingested.

He can only carry a finite amount at any given time, typically having only 6 or so of them wrapped up in his bag, if traveling around. He is unable to make more unless he has a kitchen and ingredients readily available, taking thirty minutes or more to craft. Given this box is on his person it is removable, while the donuts themselves only require one bite to work but activate their healing effect after being ingested for 10 seconds. Since this is a food item its limited to only working on living creatures who are capable of eating and digestion.

Essence Cost: 50

Jeff Edit: Negative Modifiers can never reduce the price of an Ability to less than 50 per rank. As with all "Ongoing" type Effects (of which Adaptation: Starvation and Thirst is one), it will last until the end of the scene, so if the scene ends before 1-3 days, so will the "buff". If it lasts longer (which it may, but isn't likely), it'll last the duration you specified. I'm not sure the Limit you added is a viable one, I'll check with Bandit. The exclusion of people who cannot eat is a very tiny detriment, as most beings will be able to eat. Change it to "Must be Eaten" to be appropriate.

 

[Ricter]

User name: Ricter

Name of Ability?
Healing Donuts

Ability Effects:
Healing [Rank 5] + 1000
Removable [Rank 5] – 250, Finite [Rank 5] – 250, Limited [Rank 5] - 250

Descriptor: Combining culinary skill, alchemy, and healing magics Ricter can bake special donuts that when eaten recovers the health of the target. With minor enchantments on the treats, no matter how they look, when eaten they taste delicious and almost too good to want to put down.

He can only carry a finite amount at any given time, typically having only 6 or so of them wrapped up in his bag, if traveling around. He is unable to make more unless he has a kitchen and ingredients readily available, taking thirty minutes or more to craft. Given this box is on his person, it is removable, while the donuts themselves only require one bite to activate their healing effect. Since this is a food item its limited to only working on people that eat it, as it can’t be used any other way.

Essence Cost: 250

Jeff Edit: Approved!

 

[Ahana Varma]

User name: Reece

Name of Ability?
Burning Heart of the Divine Conflagration

Ability Effects:
NOTE: This is not a new ability... or really an upgrade to an old one. It's more of a downgrade. I spoke to Doug on the Discord to get permission to do this, though. What I'm wanting to do is move two effects from one ability to another (then upgrade those effects to Affect Multiple). I'll submit these two things as separate forms, because it'll be less confusing that way.
Also, because this is a downgrade to an existing ability, I'll just put the cost as "100", as it can't be a negative number... but it is actually supposed to be -100.


REMOVING:

Adaptation 2
Chemical or Toxic Environments (-50)
Disease (-50)


NEW ABILITY AFTER REMOVALS:

Adaptation 2
Incredible Cold Environments (100)
Incredible Heat Environments (100)

Endurance 1 (100)

Protection 1 (100)
--Ongoing (100)

Descriptor: This ability has no visual effect. Thanks to the magic within her body, Ahana is more resilient than most people, with her bare skin being resistant to knives and other light damage. She also has substantially more stamina than the average person and is unaffected by even the most extreme temperature fluctuations.

Essence Cost: 100

Jeff Edit: Your 600 Essence Ability now costs you 500 Essence. Next time, just include the cost of the old ability in the Description and the cost of the new ability in the Essence Cost.

 

[Ahana Varma]

User name: Reece

Name of Ability?
Indiscriminate Aura of the Divine Conflagration

Ability Effects:
NOTE: This is an upgrade to an existing ability, so the cost being listed at the bottom is only the difference between the two. You can see the original in my joining application or character profile.

UPDATED ABILITY:

Healing 2 (400)
--Affects Multiple 2 (200)
--Ongoing (200)
--Nondiscriminating (-100)

Adaptation 2
Chemical or Toxic Environments (50)
Disease (50)
--Affects Multiple 2 (200)
--Ongoing (200)
--Nondiscriminating (-100)

Descriptor: Whenever anyone within 20 feet of Ahana is in any way harmed, small, golden flames break out spontaneously over the injured area, before quickly shrinking away and leaving fresh, unblemished skin behind. This ability affects herself, allies and enemies alike… making it of questionable use in a fight. It is currently able to heal the equivalent of one moderate injury per person (such as a sword slash) every few seconds, with more serious injuries taking longer.

Also, though this cannot be seen by the naked eye as it occurs on a microscopic level, her aura actually repairs all damage done by diseases and poisons faster than it can be inflicted, rendering everyone within range immune to the effects of those.

Essence Cost: 400

Jeff Edit: second verse, same as the first. Approved at new Cost. New Ability priced at 1100 Essence.

 

[Scylla]

User name: Scylla

Name of Ability?
Sic 'Em

Ability Effects:
Damage II

Positive Modifiers: Affect Multiple, Ranged

Descriptor: With a harsh command, Scylla orders one or more of her dogs to attack, sicing them on whatever poor fool(s) drew her ire. They strike quickly, digging their fangs in with a powerful bite, before releasing and drawing back to safety.

(Note: With permission from Frisco, I'm tearing apart the original Sic 'Em into two different moves)

Essence Cost: 400

Jeff Edit:

 

[Scylla]

User name: Scylla

Name of Ability?
Hold!

Ability Effects:
Debuff III

Positive Modifiers: Affect Multiple, Ongoing, Ranged

Negative Modifiers: Side Effect, Weakness

Descriptor: Scylla orders one or more of her dogs to grab someone (or multiple) and try to hold them in place. They do this with a coiling, snake-like body, wrapping around and constricting to prevent movement, which they do for however long until Scylla orders them to stand down, even at the cost of harm to themselves. While her dogs are holding someone, Scylla is incapable of moving away from them, and if at least 3 of her dogs are holding someone, she isn’t capable of moving much at all. Unsurprisingly, this order is ineffective against creatures much larger and/or physically stronger than Scylla.

(Note: Same as Sic 'Em)

Essence Cost: 675

Jeff Edit:

 

[Ricter]

User name: Ricter

Name of Ability?
Healing Donuts

Ability Effects:
Healing [Rank 5] + 1000
Removable [Rank 5] – 250, Finite [Rank 5] – 250, Limited [Rank 5] - 250

Descriptor: Description: Combining culinary skill, alchemy, and healing magics Ricter can bake special donuts that when eaten recovers the health of the target. With minor enchantments on the treats, no matter how they look, when eaten they taste delicious and offer a rejuvenating energy packed sensation when ingested.

He can only carry a finite amount at any given time, typically having only 6 or so of them wrapped up in his bag, if traveling around. He is unable to make more unless he has a kitchen and ingredients readily available, taking thirty minutes or more to craft. Given this box is on his person it is removable, while the donuts themselves only require one bite to activate their healing effect. Since this is a food item its limited to only working on people that eat it, as it can’t be used any other way.

Essence Cost: 375

Jeff Edit: I think you meant to Add Self/Other, but I don't see it. It's also not reflected in the cost, and even if it was, it would bring the cost below 250 (to 125), which would put you below the minimum cost.

 

[Ricter]

User name: Ricter

Name of Ability?
Healing Donuts

Ability Effects:
Healing [Rank 5] + 1000
Self/Other [Rank 5] + 125, Removable [Rank 5] – 250, Finite [Rank 5] – 250, Limited [Rank 5] – 250,

Descriptor: Combining culinary skill, alchemy, and healing magics Ricter can bake special donuts that when eaten recovers the health of the target. With minor enchantments on the treats, no matter how they look, when eaten they taste delicious and offer a rejuvenating energy packed sensation when ingested.

He can only carry a finite amount at any given time, typically having only 6 or so of them wrapped up in his bag, if traveling around. He is unable to make more unless he has a kitchen and ingredients readily available, taking thirty minutes or more to craft. Given this box is on his person it is removable, while the donuts themselves only require one bite to activate their healing effect. Since this is a food item its limited to only working on people that eat it, as it can’t be used any other way.

Essence Cost: 375

Jeff Edit:

 

[Ricter]

User name: Ricter

Name of Ability?
Silver-vine Lolipops

Ability Effects:
Debuff [Rank 5] + 500, Need for Sleep + 50, Starvation/Thirst + 50
Ongoing + 500, Affects Multiple [Rank 1] + 150, Removable [Rank 5] – 250, Finite [Rank 5] – 250, Limited [Rank 5] – 250, Indiscriminate [Rank 5] – 250

Descriptor: Thanks to a recipe from a friend he has learned to make lollipops with certain effects to them, having multiple different colors for each one these lollipops they give off a strong scent that when unwrapped travels in a 30 foot area around the small object. The scent causes the eyes of felines to dilate and act extremely distracted to the point of being in a minor trance or dizzy spell, the world seems foggy and concentration is very difficult but it offers a nice sensation of warmth. The less will power the targets have the more supportable to the item they are, but it tastes sweet and is great for a quick treat.

They do however offer an energy boost to allow working past the late hours of night, they are filing and packed with flavor as well, while also being nutritious. He can only carry a finite amount at any given time, typically having only 5 or so of them wrapped up in his bag, if traveling around. He is unable to make more unless he has a kitchen and ingredients readily available, taking thirty minutes or more to craft. Given they are items each one is removable, while the scent is indiscriminate and affects everyone in the area around it. Luckily it is limited to only working on felines, cats, big-cats, and cat-like people who have some form of genetics to these kinds of animals.

Essence Cost: 250

Jeff Edit: The wording of this Ability is a bit... wonky. An unwrapped pop gives an Debuff Aura to cat-peeps that makes it hard for them to concentrate and such. But then you eat them and they apply the Need for Sleep and Starvation/Thirst Adaptations? I think I understand what you're going for (unwrapping a pop to provide a Debuff and eating it to provide a Buff), but remember that Effects in an Ability all resolve when you activate the Ability. I think this might be better off being placed into two separate Abilities, one for the unwrapped aura and one for the eaten boosts.

 

[Jak]

User name: Jak

Name of Ability?
Light Regeneration

Ability Effects:
Light Jak's regeneration can be extended to himself and others within reach.

Positive Modifiers: Affect Multiple, Ongoing

Descriptor: User name: Jak

Name of Ability?
Light Jak// Light Regeneration

Ability Effects:
Level 2 Healing (200 Essence)


Descriptor: Light Jak can heal wounds on himself and others within reach of himself.

Jak places a hand on a ally and/or himself as Light eco comes out of his hand and the wound disappears. Major wounds take longer to heal, however.

The healing is in the form of white eco that is absorbed into the wounds of allies.


Essence Cost: 300

Jeff Edit: In which ways is this Finite? Needs more description. When describing, try to cover the technical side (how it works) and the visual side (what it looks like).

Essence Cost: 400

Jeff Edit2: I'm still trying to wrap my head around this one. If you're looking for a Passive Regeneration on yourself:

Healing
Ongoing
Description: Jak can regenerate!

If you want to heal others and yourself.

Healing
Self/Other
Description: Jak heals wounds!

I wouldn't combine both into one Ability though.

 

[Jak]

User name: Jak

Name of Ability?
Light Jak// Light Regeneration

Ability Effects:
Healing (50)
Self/Other (50)

Descriptor: Description: Jak heals wounds!

Essence Cost: 400

Jeff Edit: the prices you included are wrong. 200 per Rank for Healing, 25 per rank for Self/Other. At 1 Rank, it would cost 225. 450 for 2 ranks. Etc. Include more detail in your description.

 

[Jak]

User name: Jak

Name of Ability?
Light Flight

Ability Effects:
Flight Level 3
600

Positive Modifiers: Ongoing

Descriptor: Light Jak Can Fly!

Essence Cost: 650

Jeff Edit: your pricing for Flight is correct. But Ongoing costs 100 per rank. As is, this Ability would cost you 900 Essence. Also needs more detail in your Description.

 

[Ricter]

User name: Ricter

Name of Ability?
Silver-vine Lolipops

Ability Effects:
Debuff [Rank 5] + 500
Ongoing + 500, Affects Multiple [Rank 5] + 250, Removable [Rank 5] – 250, Finite [Rank 5] – 250, Limited [Rank 5] – 250, Indiscriminate [Rank 5] – 250

Descriptor: Thanks to a recipe from a friend he has learned to make lollipops with certain effects to them, having multiple different colors for each one these lollipops they give off a strong scent that when unwrapped travels in a 50 foot area around the small object. The scent causes the eyes of felines to dilate and act extremely distracted to the point of being in a minor trance or dizzy spell, the world seems foggy, blurred and it makes concentration very difficult. The less will power the targets have the more supportable to the item they are, but it tastes sweet and is great for a quick treat.

Eating the candy would make the effects even worse for a feline, but eliminates the aura it gives off. He can only carry a finite amount at any given time, typically having only 5 or so of them wrapped up in his bag, if traveling around. He is unable to make more unless he has a kitchen and ingredients readily available, taking thirty minutes or more to craft. Given they are items each one is removable, while the scent is indiscriminate and affects everyone in the area around it. Luckily it is limited to only working on felines, cats, big cats, and cat-like people who have some form of genetics to these kinds of animals.

Essence Cost: 250

Jeff Edit:

 

[Jak]

User name: Jak

Name of Ability?
Light Flight

Ability Effects:
Flight 3

Positive Modifiers: Ongoing

Descriptor: Light Jak has translucent wings that can lift the eco warrior off the ground to carry himself long distances

Essence Cost: 950

Jeff Edit: I dunno where the extra 50 Essence came from, but you're approved at 900 Essence.

 

[Ahana Varma]

User name: Ahana Varma

Name of Ability?
Indiscriminate Aura of the Divine Conflagration

Ability Effects:
UPGRADING THIS (old version):

Healing 2 (400)
--Affects Multiple 2 (200)
--Ongoing (200)
--Nondiscriminating (-100)
Adaptation 2
Chemical or Toxic Environments (50)
Disease (50)
--Affects Multiple 2 (200)
--Nondiscriminating (-100)

Old Cost: 900



TO THIS (new version):

Healing 3 (600)
--Affects Multiple 2 (300)
--Ongoing (300)
--Nondiscriminating (-150)
Adaptation: Chemical or Toxic Environments (50)
--Affects Multiple 2 (100)
--Nondiscriminating (-50)
Adaptation: Disease (50)
--Affects Multiple 2 (100)
--Nondiscriminating (-50)
Adaptation: Radioactive Environments (50)
--Affects Multiple 2 (100)
--Nondiscriminating (-50)
Adaptation: Nonbiological Anatomy (300)
--Affects Multiple 2 (100)
--Nondiscriminating (-50)

New Cost: 1700

Descriptor: UPGRADING THIS (old version):

Whenever anyone within 20 feet of Ahana is in any way harmed, small, golden flames break out spontaneously over the injured area, before quickly shrinking away and leaving fresh, unblemished skin behind. This ability affects herself, allies and enemies alike… making it of questionable use in a fight. It is currently able to heal the equivalent of one moderate injury per person (such as a sword slash) every few seconds, with more serious injuries taking longer.

Also, though this cannot be seen by the naked eye as it occurs on a microscopic level, her aura actually repairs all damage done by diseases and poisons faster than it can be inflicted, rendering everyone within range immune to the effects of those.



TO THIS (new version):

Whenever anyone within 20 feet of Ahana is in any way harmed, small, golden flames break out spontaneously over the injured area, before quickly shrinking away and leaving fresh, unblemished skin behind. This ability affects herself, allies and enemies alike… making it of questionable use in a fight. It is currently able to heal one major injury per person (such as a gunshot wound) over the course of approximately ten seconds, with more serious ones taking longer. What's more, the aura is so powerful that it can even allow people to survive ordinarily fatal damage to their vital organs (e.g. decapitation) long enough to be healed.

Also, though this cannot be seen by the naked eye as it occurs on a microscopic level, her aura actually repairs all damage done by diseases, toxins and even radiation faster than it can be inflicted, rendering everyone within range effectively immune to these hazards.

Essence Cost: 1700

Jeff Edit:

 

[Ahana Varma]

User name: Ahana Varma

Name of Ability?
Indiscriminate Aura of the Divine Conflagration

Ability Effects:
.
UPGRADING THIS (old):

Healing 3 (600)
--Affects Multiple 2 (300)
--Ongoing (300)
--Nondiscriminating (-150)
Adaptation: Chemical or Toxic Environments (50)
--Affects Multiple 2 (100)
--Nondiscriminating (-50)
Adaptation: Disease (50)
--Affects Multiple 2 (100)
--Nondiscriminating (-50)
Adaptation: Radioactive Environments (50)
--Affects Multiple 2 (100)
--Nondiscriminating (-50)
Adaptation: Nonbiological Anatomy (300)
--Affects Multiple 2 (100)
--Nondiscriminating (-50)

Total Cost: 1700



TO THIS (new):

Healing 4 (800)
--Affects Multiple 2 (400)
--Ongoing (400)
--Nondiscriminating (-200)
Adaptation: Chemical or Toxic Environments (50)
--Affects Multiple 2 (100)
--Nondiscriminating (-50)
Adaptation: Disease (50)
--Affects Multiple 2 (100)
--Nondiscriminating (-50)
Adaptation: Radioactive Environments (50)
--Affects Multiple 2 (100)
--Nondiscriminating (-50)
Adaptation: Nonbiological Anatomy (300)
--Affects Multiple 2 (100)
--Nondiscriminating (-50)

Total Cost: 2050

Descriptor: .
UPGRADING THIS (old):

Whenever anyone within 20 feet of Ahana is in any way harmed, small, golden flames break out spontaneously over the injured area, before quickly shrinking away and leaving fresh, unblemished skin behind. This ability affects herself, allies and enemies alike… making it of questionable use in a fight. It is currently able to heal one major injury per person (such as a gunshot wound) over the course of approximately ten seconds, with more serious ones taking longer. What's more, the aura is so powerful that it can even allow people to survive ordinarily fatal damage to their vital organs (e.g. decapitation) long enough to be healed.

Also, though this cannot be seen by the naked eye as it occurs on a microscopic level, her aura actually repairs all damage done by diseases, toxins and even radiation faster than it can be inflicted, rendering everyone within range effectively immune to these hazards.



TO THIS (new):

Whenever anyone within 20 feet of Ahana is in any way harmed, golden flames break out spontaneously over the injured area, before receding when the healing is complete, leaving fresh, unblemished skin behind. This ability cannot be deactivated and affects herself, allies and enemies alike.

Ahana's aura is currently able to heal one likely-fatal injury (e.g. being impaled on a greatsword) per person in only a few seconds, with the time taken for more and less serious wounds being longer and shorter, respectively. In addition, the aura is so powerful that it can even allow people to survive ordinarily fatal damage to their vital organs (e.g. decapitation) long enough to be healed.

Also, though this cannot be seen by the naked eye as it occurs on a microscopic level, her aura actually repairs all damage done by diseases, toxins and even radiation faster than it can be inflicted, rendering everyone within range effectively immune to these hazards.

Essence Cost: 2050

Jeff Edit: