Ability Approval I

[Dr. McNinja]

Username: Dr. McNinja

Name of Ability?
Sparklelord, Destroyer of Worlds v2.0

Ability Effects:
SUMMON (300)
Adaptation - 650
- Need to Breathe (200)
- Disease (50)
- Falling (100)
- Nonbiological Anatomy (300)

Damage [100] Rank 5 - 500
- Transferable [+50]
- Affects Multiple [+50]
- Chaotic [-50] (You ever tried running over someone with a bike?)
- Indiscriminate [-50] (Whoever you run over)

Protection [100] Rank 7 - 350
- Transferable [+50]
- Affects Multiple [+50]
- Chaotic [-50] (Sparklelord must orient itself unnaturally)
- Limited [-50] (Must be going slower than 30 mph)
- Side Effect [-50] (it’s unexpected and may throw off the rider)

Speed [200] Rank 5 - 1250
- Transferable [+50]
- Affects Multiple [+50]
- Ongoing [+100]
- Chaotic [-50] (Must slow down to turn hard)

Movement [200] (Riding on walls) - 200
- Transferable [+50]
- Affects Multiple [+50]
- Chaotic [-50] (VERY hard to steer, no hard turns)
- Limited [-50] (Must be moving at least 40 mph while riding Sparklelord)

Flight [200] Rank 4 - 600
- Transferable [+50]
- Affects Multiple [+50]
- Chaotic [-50] (Can’t change directions while in the air)
- Limited [-50] (Requires some sort of slope, even if not reasonable motorcycle ramp; or, must be on wall)
- Activation [-50]

Descriptor: A motorcycle. Well, an evil unicorn demigod trapped in the form of a motorcycle. The Crossroads isn't attuned enough with the Radical Lands to support Sparklelord's true form, so it transformed them into the closest possible thing - a white motorcycle with rainbow stripes along the side. While they appear to be a regular motorcycle, if a little queer-coded, they are supernaturally fast and powerful, as well as sentient. However, they're also intensely evil, and have a deep-seated hatred for Dr. McNinja, the Crossroads, and existence in general. Good thing they're under Doc's control! Right?

Mechanically, Sparklelord follows the rules of motorcycles in Dr. McNinja. It can move on its own. The motorcycle can take up to three passengers, if the other two people really squeeze in on it. A person can ride it at up to 105 mph seemingly indefinitely and unaffected by the weight of its passengers. However, when making hard turns or doing any complicated maneuvers, the motorcycle needs to slow down to at least 30 mph before doing so. Of course, like all motorcycles, the rider can be dismounted via any of the usual moments.

Furthermore, the motorcycle is able to ride on walls. While it does so, it cannot make any hard turns or do any fancy maneuvers and MUST be riding at least 40 mph. It can somewhat steer? But don’t depend on it.

While riding on the wall or riding towards a ramp, Sparklelord can launch themselves into the air at up to 70 mph. You need at least 10 seconds to prepare such an ambitious jump, however. You can’t change the direction or speed of your jump once you’re in the air.

Sparklelord, while they hate their riders, is actually bound to protect them. They will, when the rider is in imminent danger, occasionally do a sicknasty stunt to protect them. However, they do so without warning the rider, and therefore may throw off the rider by “accident”.

The bike itself can be ridden by anyone that Doc allows. When it collides with an object, regardless of its actual speed, the ramming speed will cause a moderate amount of damage. It’s difficult to aim, and actually colliding with something WILL cause a crash that can lead to unpleasant situations, but… you can do it?

Essence Cost: 3550

STAFF EDIT: Approved!

 

[The Man of Nightmares]

Username: The Man of Nightmares

Name of Ability?
Empath

Ability Effects:
Sense 1 (Emotions) (100)
Sense 1 (Thoughts) (100)
+ Ongoing (100 - Shared)

Descriptor: Part of what makes The Man of Nightmares so effective at manipulation is his psychic ability to read the current emotions and surface-level thoughts of anyone within a certain range of him, even if he can’t see them. He often uses this data to inform how he to proceed when engaging a target.

Essence Cost: 300

STAFF EDIT; Approved. Keep in mind when reading thoughts to run whatever your character is gleaning past your collaborators, to avoid hurt feelings!

 

[Eszter]

Username: Eszter

Name of Ability?
Ancient Might (Upgrading)

Ability Effects:
Move Object - Rank 5 (500)
- Ongoing (Specialized, 0)

Damage - Rank 5 (500)

Descriptor: Though nothing compared to the might of a true dragon, Eszter’s magic-infused body is far stronger than one would expect from her frame, making her surprisingly dangerous in hand-to-hand combat.

Essence Cost: 1000

STAFF EDIT: Approved!

 

[Shinku]

Username: Shinku

Name of Ability?
Serpent's Grasp

Ability Effects:
Ability Effects:
Debuff (Movement) Rank 6 [600] -> Indirect [600], Ranged [300]
Debuff (Poison) Rank 6 [600] -> Ongoing [600], Indirect [600], Ranged [300]
Damage Rank 2 [200] -> Indirect [200], Indirect [200], Ranged [100]

Essence Cost: 4300
Note: Upgrade from Shadow Coil. Hence, deducting 1500

Descriptor: Snake-like shadow energies burst from the ground below the target, aiming to wrap into the victim's feet. If successful, the target is temporarily held to the ground until he/she could shake off the coil. Once the shadow energy connects though, it will puncture the victim's legs, releasing venoms that can significantly affect his/her concentration for a period of time.

Essence Cost: 2800

Edit: Approved!

When upgrading abilities, you don’t need to deduct the difference from the new version. Instead, just list the new cost and add the difference to your spent essence when approved. This is a minor issue though, just for reference in the future.

 

[Shinku]

Username: Shinku

Name of Ability?
Serpent's Boon

Ability Effects:
Healing Rank 4 [800] -> Ongoing [400], Triggered [400] (Upon injury)
Adaptation (Toxic Environments) [50]

Descriptor: Blessed with Orochi's vitality, the assassin of shadows gained the shadow demon's regenerative ability and immunity to poisons.

Essence Cost: 1650

Edit: Looks good overall, but Triggered is +50 per rank rather than +100, saving you 200 essence on this ability. Just change that and this can be approved.

 

[Chara Dreemurr]

Username: Chara Dreemurr

Name of Ability?
Save-states:

Ability Effects:
Healing 5 (200)
-Finite (-50)
-limited [only wounds suffered within the last ten seconds] (-50)
total: 500
Teleport rank 1 (300)
Finite (-50)
-Limited: only teleports to a position Chara was previously in before being injured (-50)
-total 200 essence

Descriptor: Chara views the world with a different eye than the rest, and can use that to create, with the power of her own determination, a different 'state', saving a copy of earlier physical statistics and forcing herself back into that past state. This allows her to remove wounds that were there previously, though this ability is somewhat limited - while it can overwrite wounds to an extent, severe enough damage is too difficult to rewrite, as Reality chooses to snap-back against certain levels of damage. Doing this forces Chara back into a position she was before taking these injries, sometime in the last ten seconds, teleporting her back.

While this allows her to heal injuries, it is limited to recent injuries - those incurred within the last short span of time. as a result, it cannot be used to heal injuries that are any older. This is made worse by the fact that the ability may only be used once before Chara needs to take a brief breather - roughly ten seconds or so - to focus her own magic and determination through her body to recharge the ability. Thus, if she is disabled from using the ability, or runs out of charges, any further damage before that timer cannot be fixed by use of this ability.

the teleportation is similarly limited - while she can teleport away from attacks using this ability, she is strictly limited to a convenient position she has already physically been in within the last ten seconds, down to the exact stance and pose she was in. If every single one of those positions leaves her in danger - well, that's just tough.

Essence Cost: 700

Edit: Approved!

 

[Zayin]

Username: Zayin

Name of Ability?
Blademaster

Ability Effects:
Master Skill: Knowledge (Swordplay) - Rank 5 (250)

Descriptor: As a soul bound to a pair of swords who has wielded them since his awakening, Zayin is very familiar with the use of blades. Though he prefers his own twin longswords, he is highly capable when using swords of any form.

Essence Cost: 250

STAFF EDIT: Approved!

 

[John Connor]

Username: John Connor

Name of Ability?
Master Skill : Swordsman

Ability Effects:
Username: Lucius

Name of Ability?
Sword Master

Descriptor: Knowledge of all kinds of swords from knives to regular swords.

Essence Cost: 300

 

[John Connor]

Username: John Connor

Name of Ability?
Master Skill: Knowledge

Ability Effects:
Swordsplay 6 (300)

Descriptor: Knowledge of all kinds of swords from knives to regular swords.

Essence Cost: 300

Edit: Approved!

 

[Shinku]

Username: Shinku

Name of Ability?
Serpent's Boon

Ability Effects:
Healing Rank 4 [800] -> Ongoing [400], Triggered [200] (Upon injury)
Adaptation (Toxic Environments) [50]

Descriptor: Blessed with Orochi's vitality, the assassin of shadows gained the shadow demon's regenerative ability and immunity to poisons.

Essence Cost: 1450

Edit: Approved!

 

[John Connor]

Username: John Connor

Name of Ability?
14th Legion Roman Legatus armor)

Ability Effects:
*Ongoing (300) *Removable (-150)

Descriptor: Like the description

Essence Cost: 2450

STAFF EDIT: What is the Effect of this ability? Protection? What rank of Protection?

 

[Shinku]

Username: Shinku

Name of Ability?
Muso Jikiden Eishin-ryu (Master Skill)

Ability Effects:
Weapon Mastery (Sword) Rank 6

Descriptor: Muso Jikiden Eishin-ryu is a technique centered on Iaido. Iaido was the technique of a simultaneous draw and cut motion, as opposed to cutting from a normal stance after having already drawn one's sword. Iaido is intended to develop a spirituality combined with the battlefield technique of iaijutsu (quick draw). Eishin-ryu was for training in sitting and standing techniques as well as fighting against multiple foes.

Essence Cost: 300

STAFF EDIT: Approved!

 

[John Connor]

Username: John Connor

Name of Ability?
14th Legion Roman Legatus armor

Ability Effects:
*Ongoing (300)
*Removable (-150)
*Protection (700)

Descriptor: Ancient Armor Roman Legutus Vatallion wears

Essence Cost: 850

STAFF EDIT: Is this for an NPC? If so, you don't need to get abilities for them approved.

The aside, the cost for this one is...a bit off. The effect (in this case, Protection) should be listed before any modifiers applied to it, just to make things easy to keep track of what is being applied to what.

Additionally, at your current level, you aren't able to purchase rank 7 Protection, which is what this is judging by the cost. And even if you could, the costs you've listed for the Ongoing and Removable modifiers wouldn't be accurate to the cost. So, purely as an example, if this were written up properly with costs and everything accounted for, it would be:

14th Legion Roman Legatus Armor

Protection 7 (700)
-- Ongoing (700)
-- Removable (-350)

Cost: 1,050

Again, as a final note, if this ability is for an NPC you don't need to get it approved. But if this is for a character or actual Summon, then make sure the ranks fit what you are able to purchase then resubmit it.

 

[John Connor]

Username: John Connor

Name of Ability?
Master Skill: Knowledge

Ability Effects:
Multiweapon user (Crossbow, Sword, Spear, Gun)
Crossbow/Sword/Spear- (Legatus level) Rank 6 (300)
Gun (solider level) Rank 2 (300)

Descriptor: While picking up various things in the training room, Vatallion runs across a gun for the first time.

Essence Cost: 600


STAFF EDIT: Unfortunately, you wouldn't be able to have the skill for several different weapon types like that all rolled into one Master Skill. If you wanted to purchase them, they would need to be individual skills for Crossbow, Sword and Spear.

Additionally, a rank 2 Master Skill (as you have for your gun skills here) would only cost 100, not 300.

Finally, if this is for an NPC, you don't need to get this approved. If it's for an actual character or Summon, then make sure you get all your skills, ranks and costs fixed and corrected, then resubmit.

 

[Marcus Wright]

Username: Marcus Wright

Name of Ability?
Master Skill: Knowledge

Ability Effects:
Covert/Stealth 4

Descriptor: Marcus's skill as an infiltration terminator is used in detail

Essence Cost: 200

STAFF EDIT: Marcus's skill is a bit too broad and Touches on territory that's more handled by the concealment ability than just a master skill. If you want a skill showing his experience, I'd recommend going with "Knowledge: Infiltration", which I think can handle a lot of what you want this ability to do.

 

[Sephiroth]

Username: Sephiroth

Name of Ability?
Blizzard (Ice1)

Ability Effects:
Effect: Damage 3 (300)
Modifiers: Range (150), Triggered: Proximity (150), Weakness (Ice Resistances) -25 (-75), Concentration: -50 (-150), Finite: -50 (-150),
Effect: Debuff 2: Frozen (200)
Modifiers: Range +50 (100), Triggered: Proximity +50 (100), Weakness (Ice Resistances) -25 (-50), Concentration: -50 (-100), Finite: -50 (-100)

Descriptor: A frigid spell from the Ice Materia, Sephiroth forms a crystalline form of ice before him before letting it drift off away from him. Despite its beauty, the giant crystal is dangerous as a cold aura surrounds it. Once an enemy comes close to the floating land mine, it explodes, covering the victim partially in ice and cold. Once formed Sephiroth can act as normal, only needing to keep some attention on it for the crystal to remain in play. Though it will dispel if Sephiroth is staggered or distracted. Casting the spell takes from Sephiroth’s magic points and can only be cast a few times, and the elemental nature makes the attack weak against those either natural resistant to or protected from cold.

Essence Cost: 375

STAFF EDIT: Approved!

 

[Arthur Morgan]

Username: Arthur Morgan

Name of Ability?
Two Abilities

Ability Effects:
Self-Size Alteration
Growth Rank 7 (1400E)
—Ongoing (+700E)
—Limited (Only while transformed, -350E)
—Side Effect (Huge target, -350E)
Total Cost: 1400E

Unearthly Strength
Move Object Rank 7 (700E)
—Ongoing (+700E)
—Limited (Only while transformed, -350E)
Total Cost: 1050E

Descriptor: First ability description: While in his Ghost Rider form, Arthur has the ability to alter his size at will, capable of growing up to 115 ft/35m tall. This gigantic state can be maintained for an unlimited period of time. The only side effect is that he becomes a gigantic target as a result.

Second ability description: While in his Ghost Rider form, Arthur's raw physical strength is increased to an insane degree, giving him the ability to lift around 6,400 pounds/2,903kg as easily as a sledgehammer for an ongoing period of time.

Essence Cost: 2450

STAFF EDIT: Approved!

 

[Ridley]

Username: Ridley

Name of Ability?
Upgraded Dragonflight (+300 essence)

Ability Effects:
Flight Rank 7 (1400)
-ongoing (700)

Descriptor: Ridley's wings have mostly recovered from previous battle damage, and allow him to soar through the air at impressive speeds, comparable to a bird of prey. His mobility and familiarity in the air is second to none, as he seems to be able to turn nearly on a dime and quickly move up to his full speed with just a flap of his impressive wingspan. His wings sustain flight even in space, though how this works is a mystery Ridley refuses to explain.

Essence Cost: 2100

STAFF EDIT: Approved!

 

[The Chorus]

Username: The Chorus

Name of Ability?
Upgrading Droid Systems

Ability Effects:
Adaptations – Need to Breathe (200)
Starvation and Thirst (50)
Need to Sleep (50)
Disease (50)
Non-biological Anatomy (300)
Immune to Pain (200)
[NEW] - Endurance 5 (500)

Old price: 850

Descriptor: The Chorus inhabits a droid body, eliminating many biological needs and vastly improving on others, while preserving its core even when taking a strike fatal to a living organism.

Essence Cost: 1350

STAFF EDIT: Approved!

 

[Marcus Wright]

Username: Marcus Wright

Name of Ability?
Master Skill: Knowledge

Ability Effects:
Knowledge: Infiltration 4

Descriptor: Marcus's skill as an Infiltration Terminator is used in detail.

Essence Cost: 200


STAFF EDIT: Approved