Antigono Character Application

[Antigono]

User name: Antigono

Have you read the rules? Yes

Character Name: Antigono Azherot

Character Source: OC

Starting Location: Erde Nona

Physical Tendencies:
Power(P):15%
Toughness(T):15%
Quickness(Q): 30%
Skill(S): 40%

Personality Tendencies:
Aggression(A): 20%
Cunning(C): 30%
Diplomacy(D): 30%
Support(S):20%

Physical Description:

Antigono is 20 years old, has white skin with a healty contexture, short, messy light brown hair and deep blue eyes. He also has a small scar below his right eye. He is smaller than an average adult, 1.67m and weights 70kg. His body is very fit for a lifetime of training in harsh conditions. He usually wears a white linen shirt with a leather vest above, two short swords in his waist and a travelling cape with many pockets inside.

Character History:

Antígono was born son of a prostitute who sold him into slavery as soon as she could. He spent the first 6 years of his life suffering abuse after abuse, until he was bought by a mercenary captain who took a liking to him. The Company of the Red Spear was famous for raising young kids into warriors, and Antigono was lucky enough to end up there. He also got his name and surname from the company leader, Kaladin. "It´s because of your eyes" Told him the captain one day when he asked "You had the look of a man who is going to eat the world. And you were only six!"
Of course this didnt meant he had an easy life. He trained everyday, all day, in all manners all things. From combat, to poolish boots, but it was clear soon that he was very proficient with a sword. He took part of his first battle when he reached 14. Standing on a real battlefield, Antigono froze in front of the death and despair of war. However, he acted quick when an enemy showed up, and killed the man while looking him in the eye. It was then that he felt how a part of himself was lost, at the same time that life escaped from the man in his front. He had to keep fighting of course, but unfortunetly, this proved to be the final battle of the Company of the Red Spear. The brutal battle ended with their defeat and the leader executed.
As Antigono saw Kaladin beheaded, his whole life now in ruins, he decided he had to act fast if he didnt wanted to end up the same. He fled to a small city, where he joined the army and trained there for another two years. Life seemed to be going well, when he was assigned to a garrison on a small village in the border of the country.
Tragedy struck when a party of bandits raided the village. Antigono, with only 16 years, lacked the strenght to protect everyone, but he knew he could at least buy time for the villagers to escape. He organized the garrison in a defensive formation and protected the fleeing villagers until the last of his companions fell.
When he was about to be killed, an old swordsman showed up and rescued him, single handedly routing all the bandits. He treated his wounds, and when Antigono begged him to let him become his apprentice, he refused.
-"Why do you want to become stronger? You must find a reason before I can teach you anything." Said the swordsman
Antigono, realizing he didnt had a purpose in life, started to think. And think. And think. Until after 2 weeks, he returned to the swordsman.
-"The world is a cruel place, and everywhere I go all I see is death and sadness. I want to be strong enough to change the world". The old man smiled and agreed to help him. The name of his master was Kvhote.
Thus began 4 years of an incredible though training. Many times was Antigono close to death, training day and evening and studying at night. When he turned 20, Kvhote game him two beautiful twin swords.
-"This are the swords I used when I tried to change the world. I have nothing left to teach you, so with this I entrust to you the hopes of a better tomorrow."
After a tearful goodbye, Antigono started travelling the world, with fire in his eyes and a heavy dream on his shoulders.

Abilities/Skills:

Martial Training:
Agility 5 (1000)
Endurance 3 (300)
Description: Antigono trained in the art of war his whole life, perfecting his body and learning how to inflict and avoid damage.
Cost: 1300E

Twin short swords
Damage 5 (500)
--Removable (-250)
Description: Two beatiful swords Antigono received from his teacher. Having used them for years, he has archieved an amazing level of skill with them. They dont seem to break, but he doesnt really knows why.
Cost: 250E

How much Essence did you spend? 1550E

How much Essence do you have left? 450E

Were you referred by an existing member? No

 

[Ahana Varma]

Hi there, welcome to the site. Before I can approve your character, there's just a couple things that I'll need to go over with you.

(Agility rank 4) 800E
Modifiers: Ongoing +100E
(Damage rank 3) 300E
Modifiers; Ongoing +100E
(Endurance rank 3) +300E
Modifiers: Ongoing +100E

Both of your Abilities have been written using an old format which we don't really use any more, despite it still being mentioned in the rules, so it would be best to change that.

But more importantly, you have not calculated the cost of the Modifiers correctly for "Martial Training". Although you don't seem to have had any trouble with the cost of the Modifier on your other Ability.

The costs listed for each Modifier are the costs per rank of the Effect being modified, so if your Effect is more than rank 1, the costs of the Modifiers will rise.

That said, in this case you don't actually need any of those Ongoing Modifiers, as Damage doesn't require Ongoing unless you're doing damage-over-time, like setting someone on fire, and both Agility and Endurance have the Ongoing Modifier by default, as is mentioned in their descriptions on the Abilities page of the rules, so you're fine to remove the Modifiers from this Ability.

As such, the Effects of your "Martial Training" Ability should be written like this:

Agility 4 (800)
Damage 3 (300)
Endurance 3 (300)

The Effects of your other Ability, written in the new format, would look like this:

Damage 5 (500)
--Removable (-250)

 

[Antigono]

Hi, thank you. I was using one another character as a reference, so perhaps thas the reason. You are right, I made a miscalculation haha And thanks for clarifing that about damage. Damage over time its not what I was aiming, so ill just take it out. Do I have to make an edit here?

 

[Ahana Varma]

Yes, if you just edit your first post with the changes then we'll approve your character after that's done.

As a side-note, I've spoken to some other members of staff who have said that it's fine for you to format your Abilities the way you have in your initial post, so if you do prefer to keep writing "Modifiers;" before each Effect's Modifiers then you're free to do so.

 

[Antigono]

Thank you, I have already edited it and should be okay now. I raised Agility to 5 and changed the format too, if its not a problem.

 

[Ahana Varma]

Looks great, so your character is approved.

You can post in the Character Profiles section and start writing whenever you like.