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Aquarius

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Username: Aquarius

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Character Name: Aquarius

Character Source: OC on Erde Nona

Starting Location: Erde Nona

Character Behavior:
- Sadistic Tactician

Aquarius is an old automaton born from early eras of Arcadia. Once a well known bodyguard for the royalty of that passed time, he found himself defeated in combat by a usurper. Since then his name became long dead and he was locked in a cavern somewhere in the vast Hinterlands. He was known as being disturbingly ruthless. He lacks empathy and sees most living creatures as expendable. Murdering and betrayal are naught but tools in his eyes.

Physical Description:

His garb is similar to that of an Eastern monk or that of a samurai. He‘s an automaton who could be described as skeletal. His inner workings and iron flesh are made to look like a human skeleton as a factor of intimidation. Some magic has prevented his skin from rusting and his head consists of being wired upward to a glowing red hat.

Character History:

- Aquarius was a protectorate automaton for royalty and nobles amongst the older eras of Arcadia.
- Some lone warrior defeated him when those in charge changed.
- He’s been locked away for a long time and disagrees with the current royalty of Arcadia.

What starting Affinity does your character have? Gifted

Abilities/Skills:

Skills (Gifted):
(The Sadist) Skill Group Rank 5: [250 Essence]
You Are Beneath Me / Social (Intimidation)
- Aquarius sees most as less than he is. He can use this overconfidence to intimidate people into doing tasks for him
Machine Heart / Social (Resist Persuasion Skills)
- He is pitiless and lacking empathy. Aquarius is not swayed by sob stories or motivations of the heart.
Whats Mine is Mine / Subterfuge (Sleight of Hand)
- Nothing you have belongs to you. It belongs to Aquarius and he will attempt to take it when your back is turned.
The One Who Bumps in The Night / Social (Resist Intimidation Skills)
- He has no fear of man. The automaton does not give in easy to threats or blackmail.
An Ancient Threat / Knowledge (History)
- Aquarius is an old being. He knows much about the crossroads, especially Erde Nona.

(The Tactician) Skill Group Rank 5: [250 Essence]
A Refined One / Craft (Electronic Devices)
- Having had no one to work on him for what must have been centuries he did it all himself. Aquarius can craft intel devices such as small recorders and communicators.
The Warfield / Research (City or Kingdom Layouts)
- Aquarius is no stranger to places he has fought. He can study cities or heavily populated areas to find advantages or hidden areas.
A Fleshless Opposition / Athletics (Ability to traverse difficult terrain)
- Not requiring stamina or feeling much pain, Aquarius can walk across broken glass, swim through mud and have no issue moving through deep thickets.
A False Profit / Social (Bartering)
- You did not price it low enough. Aquarius knows what he owes you and will tell you as many times as necessary to make sure the price is right.
Not Good Enough / Knowledge (Item Strength)
- He knows what is a good piece of equipment and what isn't. Aquarius can appraise weaponry and armor to see if they would actually help.

Abilities:

The Teeth of Old Arcadia. Rank 5
Damage (+500) Removable (-250)
Debuff (+500) Removable (-250)
[500 Essence]

This double ended weapon has been with Aquarius since he can remember. It acts similarly to a bo staff, yet it has electrical charged ends. Anyone struck with this terrifying weapon and lives will see themselves paralyzed. As much as this weapon is in Aquarius‘ mind as inseparable from him, it can be removed from his person.

The Maw of Old Arcadia. Rank 5.
Damage (+500) Finite (-250) Ranged (+250) Activation (-250)
Move Object (+500) Finite (-250) Ranged (+250) Activation (-250)
[500 Essence]

Aquarius is however a weapon on his own even without his Teeth. From either of his hands he is able to launch a condense orb of heat and energy that explodes upon impact with the first thing it connects with. It will not only severely damage the target, but send it flying backwards with immense force. This weapon can only be used (5) times in a day and requires about 10 seconds of actovation.

How much Essence did you spend? 1500

How much Essence do you have left? 500

Were you referred by an existing member? No

What is your Discord name? ghostorchid
 
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Hey there, neat character concept! I just have a few notes on your skills and abilities here.

For your “The Sadist” skill group - What type of skill are each of these? Please fit them into categories like those on the Master Skills page. For example Driving (Horseback) or Social (Intimidation).

Also, please provide written descriptions for your skills. Keep in mind that your skills listing “resilience” to certain things will not function the same as Protection Effects, so if someone hits you with a Fear or Charm Debuff, you can’t resist it completely because Skills are not replacements for Abilities!

For your “The Tactician” skill group -

Same as the above, please provide descriptions and try to match these Skills to different “types” of Skills.

Also keep in mind that your Stealth skill will not function the same as a Concealment Ability, and your Sense Presence/Sense Motive skills cannot function the same as true Sense Abilities.

For “The Teeth of Old Arcadia” –
This part, “Damage inflicted by this weapon electrifies its target, causing them to take more damage from hits while it remains electrified.” What is the Debuff here, exactly? Are they immobilized? Please clarify in your description!

Can you also please list your Effects with their individual modifiers and ranks on separate lines, it’s a bit hard to understand which modifiers or rank are applied to which Effects currently.

For “The Maw of Old Arcadia” -

Is this Ability only usable when Aquarius is disarmed? If so, you could apply the Limited modifier to your Effects and save some Essence.
 

Aquarius

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Hey! Thanks for the feedback, still trying to grasp everything
- I edited the skills to be more similar to the known archetypes and added descriptors to help explain their function
- The Teeth of Old Arcadia's debuff is now for the targets defense, meaning the next hit from anything would deal more damage to it.
- I removed the 'when disarmed' from The Maw of Old Arcadia, it is meant to act as a buff to his normal fighting.
 

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Alright, skills look good!

For The Teeth of Old Arcadia:
- Since this weapon’s Damage Effect is Removable because your character can be disarmed, you could also apply that same Removable modifier to the Debuff Effect. This will save you Essence!
- Also, I forgot to note this, but please mention in your description that your character can be disarmed (Removable modifier). This could be a simple sentence, “Aquarius can be disarmed.”

For The Maw of Old Arcadia:
- The thing about self-buffs is that Ranks are not additive. So while your character might have a Damage Rank 5 staff, having a separate Damage Rank 3 ability cannot augment/add to the power level of your character’s Damage Rank 5 staff ability. It’s stuck at Rank 5 until you purchase an upgrade. Something which might be similar to a self-buff would be purchasing a Consumable or using Focus.

Also, would you please list your Effects with their individual modifiers and ranks on separate lines? It’s a bit hard to understand which modifiers or ranks are applied to which Effects currently.
 

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Okay here goes;

- The Teeth of Old Arcadia is now altered to have a paralyzing effect upon impact
- The Maw of Old Arcadia is now rather a charged blast ability rather than a debuff
- Spaced the essence numbers to make it a bit more legible.
 

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Alrighty, looks good to me! You're approved! You can go ahead and post your character information in the Character Profiles section of the forum. Happy writing!
 
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