Bits of Happiness Character Application

[Alstomeria (Allia) Way]

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Have you read the rules? Yes

Character Name: Alstroemeria (Allia) Way

Character Source: oc

Starting Location: Mesa Roja

Character Behavior:
Allia is quite the impressionable optimist, easily trusts others. she's also a pacifist, and seeks to help others however she can. can come off as overbearing for she will offer to help and assist others even at the cost of her own health or happiness. she is very sharply contrasted by Spruce. is a people pleaser, simply wants to make those around her happy. once she is contacted by the arbiter who she believes to be a goddess she is quick to worship and "spread her message". she's also a very touchy and huggy person. will ask for physical comfort when in distress, and offers it to others when they are upset. always asks first, of course.

Physical Description:

young girl with tan skin and white freckles. she's got a heart shaped face with a button nose and large, round green eyes. her hair is short and fluffy in the back, with messy bangs that fall to her eyebrows and two longer pieces of hair falling down her front. her hair is a dark brown with pink streaks throughout it. she's a slim girl who stands around 5'3". when coming to the crossroads, she's wearing the outfit depicted below. a school uniform, the same she died in seeing as she was a senior at the time of her death.

Character History:

there isn't too much of a history to speak of, her childhood was in our world and fairly normal. she grew up, went to school. her mother was verbally and emotionally abusive, but died when she was around 11. she's got ptsd from it still, but it isn't as bad as it would have been otherwise. it's mostly resulted in her being a people pleaser and she kinda freaks out when people, especially older women, yell at her. her father was away for work a lot, and failed to protect her. he was away for work even as she was older, so she learned to take care of herself. her brother is about 11 years older than her and lives across the country, only calling occasionally. he sends her gifts on her birthdays and whatnot.
Spruce was a stray cat she has been feeding for a couple of years(psa don't actually feed stray cats, she just didn't know any better) they had grown quite close, and they actually died because Allia pushed him out of the way of a car, right into the path of another car. the impact didn't actually kill the pair, simply split them in two and sent half of them to the crossroads. Spruce in the crossroads is more human like in his actions and thinking, and can speak human language and communicate. it's kinda overwhelming for him. he's working on it.

What starting Affinity does your character have? Immortal

Abilities/Skills:

Enhanced Regeneration

Healing - Rank 3 (600)

• Ongoing (300)
• Activation (30s) (-300)

Allia's body heals at an accelerated rate. it takes 30 seconds to a minute to a minute to kick in, and the healing is still a slow process rather than immediate(though it depends on how healthy and well fed/hydrated/rested she is). she's got the immortal affinity, so it takes awhile but she can bring herself back from the dead. the ability itself costs (+600), then (+300) because it's ongoing. then (-300) because it takes awhile to activate. that's (600) total.

Spruce

Summon (300)

Move Object - Rank 3 (300)

• Ongoing (300)

Shrinking - Rank 2 (400)

• Ongoing (200)
• Limited (cannot change size) (-100)

Total cost: 1400

Spruce is a summon. he's a brown tabby furry, almost shaggy, cat that is larger than a normal house cat. he's about as tall as her knees and stays this height at all times (+500). he's (+300) because summon. he's also got quite some strength that's move object three ranks (+300). another (+300) is added because it's ongoing. that's a total of (1400)

How much Essence did you spend? 2000

How much Essence do you have left? 0

Were you referred by an existing member? found this off a website haha no name was listed

What is your Discord name? MilkshakeTG#1514

 

[Sigmund Vrell]

Hey there!

Your application here mostly looks good, the only thing of note is your abilities. We typically write out our abilities in a format roughly like this:

(Name)

(Effect) - Rank X ((price))

• (Modifier) (+/- (price))

Total cost:

(Description of the ability)

(The dot points aren’t explicitly needed as long as the modifiers are in the right spot, I just like to use them)

So for instance, your healing ability would be something like

Enhanced Regeneration (this name could really be whatever you want)

Healing - Rank 3 (600)

• Ongoing (300)
• Activation (30s) (-300)

Total cost: 600

Followed by the ability description. You can pretty much use what you already have, though listing the costs and modifiers outright isn’t necessary

As shown in the example, modifiers also change their cost based on the rank of the effect they’re attached to (something of note for Spruce’s Move Object) and we like to specify the time associated with activation in the modifier (if it’s variable like yours, the minimum is fine)

Once your abilities are in the proper format, I can approve you!

 

[Alstomeria (Allia) Way]

Hey there!

Your application here mostly looks good, the only thing of note is your abilities. We typically write out our abilities in a format roughly like this:

(Name)

(Effect) - Rank X ((price))

• (Modifier) (+/- (price))

Total cost:

(Description of the ability)

(The dot points aren’t explicitly needed as long as the modifiers are in the right spot, I just like to use them)

So for instance, your healing ability would be something like

Enhanced Regeneration (this name could really be whatever you want)

Healing - Rank 3 (600)

• Ongoing (300)
• Activation (30s) (-300)

Total cost: 600

Followed by the ability description. You can pretty much use what you already have, though listing the costs and modifiers outright isn’t necessary

As shown in the example, modifiers also change their cost based on the rank of the effect they’re attached to (something of note for Spruce’s Move Object) and we like to specify the time associated with activation in the modifier (if it’s variable like yours, the minimum is fine)

Once your abilities are in the proper format, I can approve you!

I edited my sheet, haha hope I did it right? thank you so much for your help !!!

 

[Sigmund Vrell]

Hey again!

Enhanced regeneration looks good, but there are a couple of things to note about Spruce before I can approve you.

First, Summon is an effect rather than a modifier, so the summon effect for Spruce wouldn’t be under Move Object but rather on the same level as it, or on its own altogether with a separate ability just to represent Spruce himself.

Second, the description of the ability doesn’t match the purchased effects and modifiers anymore, namely the price of the ongoing effect, the damage effect still being included but not purchased, and the total cost of the ability being 900 rather than 800.

 

[Alstomeria (Allia) Way]

Hey again!

Enhanced regeneration looks good, but there are a couple of things to note about Spruce before I can approve you.

First, Summon is an effect rather than a modifier, so the summon effect for Spruce wouldn’t be under Move Object but rather on the same level as it, or on its own altogether with a separate ability just to represent Spruce himself.

Second, the description of the ability doesn’t match the purchased effects and modifiers anymore, namely the price of the ongoing effect, the damage effect still being included but not purchased, and the total cost of the ability being 900 rather than 800.

alrighty!!! think I got it? thank you for your patience!

 

[Sigmund Vrell]

You’re pretty close!

The main thing to address is the discrepancy between Spruce’s description and his effects. Specifically, the Ongoing is listed as 100 when it should be 300, and the damage for Spruce’s claws isn’t listed under the effects (it would be its own effect like summon is)

Additionally, I apologise for missing this, but Spruce will need Shrinking to be cat-sized. If you hold off on getting his claws, Rank 2 of shrink with Ongoing and Limited (Does not change size) should be right within your budget.

 

[Alstomeria (Allia) Way]

You’re pretty close!

The main thing to address is the discrepancy between Spruce’s description and his effects. Specifically, the Ongoing is listed as 100 when it should be 300, and the damage for Spruce’s claws isn’t listed under the effects (it would be its own effect like summon is)

Additionally, I apologise for missing this, but Spruce will need Shrinking to be cat-sized. If you hold off on getting his claws, Rank 2 of shrink with Ongoing and Limited (Does not change size) should be right within your budget.

I’m so sorry I don’t understand how I’d format this, I’m so sorry for the trouble!!!! I’m just really confused, mind rewording it or something?

 

[Sigmund Vrell]

Without changing too much, this is how I would recommend formatting it:

Spruce

Summon (300)

Move Object - Rank 3 (300)

• Ongoing (300)

Shrinking - Rank 2 (400)

• Ongoing (200)
• Limited (cannot change size) (-100)

Total cost: 1400

Spruce is a summon. he's a brown tabby furry, almost shaggy, cat that is larger than a normal house cat. he's about as tall as her knees and stays this height at all times (+500). he's (+300) because summon. he's also got quite some strength that's move object three ranks (+300). another (+300) is added because it's ongoing. that's a total of (1400)


This way, the +100 essence that was in the description has been changed to +300 to match with the associated effects. Formatting it this way, he doesn't have his claws at the moment, but you can buy them after you've gained 100 essence, which probably won't take long at all. Alternatively, if you're looking to changing it a bit more, you could forgo the costs in the description altogether, getting something like this:

"Spruce is a brown tabby furry, almost shaggy, cat that is larger than a normal house cat. he's about as tall as Allia's knees and accompanies her. he's also got quite some strength to him, able to move about 400 pounds."

It's mostly up to you which of the two descriptions you go with, it's pretty much down to preference.

 

[Alstomeria (Allia) Way]

Without changing too much, this is how I would recommend formatting it:

Spruce

Summon (300)

Move Object - Rank 3 (300)

• Ongoing (300)

Shrinking - Rank 2 (400)

• Ongoing (200)
• Limited (cannot change size) (-100)

Total cost: 1400

Spruce is a summon. he's a brown tabby furry, almost shaggy, cat that is larger than a normal house cat. he's about as tall as her knees and stays this height at all times (+500). he's (+300) because summon. he's also got quite some strength that's move object three ranks (+300). another (+300) is added because it's ongoing. that's a total of (1400)


This way, the +100 essence that was in the description has been changed to +300 to match with the associated effects. Formatting it this way, he doesn't have his claws at the moment, but you can buy them after you've gained 100 essence, which probably won't take long at all. Alternatively, if you're looking to changing it a bit more, you could forgo the costs in the description altogether, getting something like this:

"Spruce is a brown tabby furry, almost shaggy, cat that is larger than a normal house cat. he's about as tall as Allia's knees and accompanies her. he's also got quite some strength to him, able to move about 400 pounds."

It's mostly up to you which of the two descriptions you go with, it's pretty much down to preference.

think I'm done? thank you !!!

 

[Sigmund Vrell]

Ok, this all looks in order to me. You're approved! You can go ahead and post your profile over in the character profiles forum (found here: https://multerra.zulenka.com/index.php?forums/character-profiles.19/ ) and then you can start writing.

Welcome to Multerra!