Bodhendris Character Application

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Malloki Tuwile

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User name: Bodhendris

Have you read the rules? No

Character Name: Xenocrates

Character Source: OC

Starting Location: Erde Nona

Physical Tendencies:
Power:
25%
Toughness: 25%
Quickness: 25%
Skills: 25%

Xenocrates, being knew to his power and having no preconceived notion of fighting on this level, has not developed a particular tendency one way or another.

Personality Tendencies:
Aggression:
10%
Cunning: 20%
Diplomacy: 50%
Support: 20%

He is a curious and sometimes helpful type, relying more on logic and reason to solve his problems than brute force, though he will close a hand when the fist is absolutely necessary.

Physical Description:

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Xenocrates is human - at least by his appearances. By most standards, Xenocrates is quite fetching. His dark brown hair is cut shorter on the sides and back, but not shaved. The top is normally brushed back in a natural, messy pompadour. While his frame is not of hulking muscle, there is more definition than one might expect of a man of knowledge. All this combined with the clean shave suggests Xenocrates takes pride in health and appearance.​

Littered across his body are a number of tattoos. The most noticeable is that upon his neck, which is some form of foreign symbol. He has since forgotten the meaning. Upon his left pectoral, over his heart, is the quote; "Each man's soul is his genius" - XENOCRATES

Character History:

Earth, December 31st 2199, The X-0-Tic program entered into the Testing phase, to celebrate the turn of the century. The X-0 Generator was designed to draw power from an exotic dimension composed of energy with zero physical dimensions. The hope was to finally have a free, infinite fuel source for the colonized worlds.​

What was not expected was the backlash. At 11:59pm, the machine was powered on and opened the breach into the X-0 dimension. As desired, energy was pulled from the rift - an infinite amount. Through unknown variables, the infinite energy created in itself another rift, one that pulled at the fabric of space and time.​

Like the energy that flowed from high concentration to low, space and time flowed from one dimension to another. Through the infinitesimally small point, energy flowed out and everything else was sucked in. Including the one unlucky scientist who chose to spend his New Years in the lab, opening the rift while the rest were safely off-site.​


This scientist awoke in a new world, his memories fragmented. He had one solid link to the past; his lab badge. Where a name should have been, letters were scrambled and illegible. The top of the badge read X-0-Tic.​

Abilities/Skills:

X-0-Skeleton
- 500 Essence
Protection 5 (500)
--Ongoing (500)
--Activation 2 (-500)
--Side Effect (Deafness) (-250)
Damage 5 (500)
--Triggered (touch) (250)
--Indiscriminate (-250)
--Side-Effect (noisy) (-250)

Xenocrates can exude exotic energy from his flesh. This energy is dangerous to any who merely brush up against him. Even an innocent creature that touches this material takes damage akin to boiling hot, potent acid with an electrical charge. This prohibits the armor from being worn all the time, as Xenocrates fears bringing harm to those who do not deserve it. Not to mention, this energy creates a crackling sound that makes stealthiness difficult.

The main focus of X-0-Skeleton is to act like armor. The energy slowly condenses, taking a little over half a minute before the armor is completely solid enough to protect from blows. This does not remove the damage it can deal upon contact, but the concentrated exotic material creates a deep, energetic hum combined with a high pitched whine that makes hearing quite difficult.

How much Essence did you spend? 500

How much Essence do you have left? 1500

Were you referred by an existing member?
 
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Ahana Varma

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Heya there, welcome to Multerra.

Your character looks good, but there are just a few things about his Ability which we'll need to sort out before approving this application.

1) For the costs of each Effect/Modifier (listed in brackets beside them), please write the total for that Effect/Modifier, rather than the per rank value.

2) For the Activation Modifier, please write "2" after the word "Activation". Modifiers don't technically have ranks of their own, but in the case of Activation, it has both 10-second and 30-second variants, so doing this lets people know at a glance that you are using the more severe version of the Negative Modifier.

3) If you are taking Side-Effect Modifiers then please add in brackets beside the Modifier a very brief (one or two word, ideally) description of what the Side-Effect is. You can go into more detail in the description if you want to make it clearer to people. I'm assuming that the Side-Effect in this case is the crackling noise? If so, you could write that Modifier like this: "Side-Effect (noisy) (-250)".

It wouldn't hurt to do the same for your Triggered Modifier, but I don't think we've usually bothered asking people to clarify triggers, so you don't need to in that case if you don't want to.


If you can just edit your post with those changes and comment here to let us know when you've done that, we'll then approve your character for you.



P.S. This part is not mandatory, but we actually have a recommended format for writing Abilities (which has unfortunately not yet been added to the Rules page). I've re-written your Ability here in that format. If you would like to use it, you can just copy & paste the text in the spoiler into your post above in place of the current version of the Ability.

X-0-Skeleton - 500 Essence
Protection 5 (500)
--Ongoing (500)
--Activation 2 (-500)
--Side Effect (noisy) (-250)
Damage 5 (500)
--Triggered (touch) (250)
--Indiscriminate (-250)
--Side-Effect (noisy) (-250)

Xenocrates can exude exotic energy from his flesh. This energy is dangerous to any who merely brush up against him. Even an innocent creature that touches this material takes damage akin to boiling hot, potent acid with an electrical charge. This prohibits the armor from being worn all the time, as Xenocrates fears bringing harm to those who do not deserve it. Not to mention, this energy creates a crackling sound that makes stealthing difficult.

The main focus of X-0-Skeleton is to act like armor. The energy slowly condenses, taking a little over half a minute before the armor is completely solid enough to protect from blows. This does not remove the damage it can deal upon contact, but any clothing Xenocrates wears will be absolutely shredded.
 

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Regarding the format: yeah, I understand why you would go with what's in the rules, that's perfectly understandable. Like Jeff said, we're in the process of updating stuff.

As for the Ability, after discussing it a little with some other staff members, we've decided that the nudity thing shouldn't really count as a Side-Effect. You can still have the Damage Effect destroy his clothes if you want, but if he's accustomed to having his clothes destroyed regularly, then it's not likely to bother him too much, and therefore isn't really worth a reduction in the Essence cost of the Ability.

If you would like to have two Side-Effects then you can stick with what I originally wrote (using "noisy" for both; the Protection could make a constant, loud buzz while active and the Damage could make a zapping noise whenever something touches him, for example).

Or, if you would prefer two different Side-Effects, you could choose to make it tiring to use, or his movement speed could be reduced while it's active, or you could make it so that he can't hear (because all the loud noise deafens him?)... or any of a large number of other things. Side-Effects can vary a lot, but you just have to remember that given how much Essence you can save by taking them, they are supposed to be pretty significant negative effects.

If you have any other ideas for potential Side-Effects, you can run them by us here or can join our Discord server and ask there (you'd likely get a quicker response that way).
 

Malloki Tuwile

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Damage side effect: "Well they hear me coming."
Armor side effect: "DID YOU SAY SOMETHING?"

Did not think of the noise effecting myself, but it makes sense now that I do. I love it. XD
 
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