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User name: Chitza

Have you read the rules? Yes

Character Name: Hiccup

Character Source: Canon - How To Train Your Dragon

Starting Location: Erde Nona

Physical Tendencies:
  • Power(P): 30
  • Toughness(T): 25
  • Quickness(Q): 10
  • Skill(S): 35

Personality Tendencies:
  • Aggression(A): 10
  • Cunning(C): 30
  • Diplomacy(D): 30
    Support(S): 30

Physical Description:

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For reference, Hiccup stands at 6"1' and has metal prosthetic left leg.

Character History:

(I'll go into way more detail in a profile, so no spoilers here etc)

Hiccup and Toothless go in search of the Hidden Dragon world, instead ending up in the Crossroads, crash landing on the coast of a remote part of Erde Nona.

Abilities/Skills:

Toothless
Summon (300)
Modifiers: None
Total: 300

Night Fury. Once thought of as the "unholy offspring of lightning and death itself", Toothless has proven to be much more of a giant, winged pussycat than the stuff of nightmares, to those he deems a friend, at least.
Flight (Toothless)
Flight 5 (500)
Modifiers: Ongoing (100)
Total: (600)
Toothless is noted to be able to fly at speed of over 100 mph. His aerial acrobatics, though requiring Hiccup's help to pull off, allow him to escape rather brutal confrontations with little difficulty.​
Fire Blast
Damage 1 (100)
-Ranged (50)
-Triggered - Upon Impact (100)
-Affects Multiple 2 (100)
-Ongoing (100)
-Finite - 10 shots (-50)
Total (400)
Toothless takes a big inhale of air before expelling a ball of fire (roughly basketball sized) that travels in a straight line. Upon impact, the target is engulfed in flame for a moment leaving them with a lingering burn, which continues to deal damage. If the blast misses Toothless' target, it leaves a ring of fire on the surface of whatever it hits. Toothless is only able to store and fire off 10 fire blasts before having to "recharge" his supply.​
Inferno
Damage 2 (200)
Modifiers: Removable (-100)
Total: 100

Inferno, also known as the Dragon Blade, is a retractable sword that serves as Hiccup Horrendous Haddock III's main weapon. The sword has several features, most notably the ability to become engulfed in flame.

How much Essence did you spend? 1500

How much Essence do you have left? 0

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Your application is mostly fine, though the Abilities belonging to Toothless should really include its name in their titles, to avoid confusion. If you take a look at Okina's Profile, you can see that she has done this with her summons' Abilities.

Also, you haven't actually given yout Flight 5 Ability a name. You'll need to do that, even if the name is as simple as "Flight (Toothless)".

Lastly, I'm confused as to what Fire Blast is supposed to do. You haven't explained in your description why it has a Debuff Effect or a Limited Modifier. Also, you've only applied the Modifiers to Debuff, not Damage.
If you just want a Damage 1 Ability which sets people on fire, that would be:

Fire Blast [250]
Damage 1 (100)
--Ongoing (100)
--Affects Multiple 1 (50)

Note 1: You can write the Effect/Modifier list in the way you have done if you like, but it's neater if you just use hyphens (or bullet points, or some other symbol) to indicate the Modifiers beneath each Effect. You can also save space by including the total cost next to the Ability's name, rather than on a separate line.

Note 2: I'm not sure how Fire Blast works exactly, as I've not seen the movie. Assuming it's just like a regular dragon breathing fire, as your description makes it sound, then you don't require Ranged for this.
Adding Ranged to an Effect with Affects Multiple just allows you to move the point of origin for the area of effect (e.g. throwing a grenade before it explodes).
Affects Multiple 1 gives you a range of up to 20 feet in which Toothless' breath can set things on fire. This can be increased by purchasing Affects Multiple additional times (the number of iterations of the Modifier are indicated by the number after its name; each costs 50 Essence per rank of Effect and increases the AoE by 20 feet).

If you would still like to include a Debuff and/or Limit for your Ability, you will need to explain what those do in the Ability description.

The sword looks fine as it is, though for the record, the phrase "become inflamed" in the description should probably be changed to "be set aflame". I'm reasonably certain that you've misunderstood the meaning of the word "inflamed", as it doesn't actually have anything to do with fire.


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I've updated the things you've asked for. I was following the guide in the PDF on the effects page so admittedly I was on auto pilot. Also forgive muh bad engrish there. Long day of work :)
 

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Your fire blast ability is kinda formatted weird- for the modifiers in the list at the bottom, do they apply to both parts of the ability, or just the debuff? (Or did you just forget to take them out, thats ok too) In addition the way you’ve listed it, the debuff only hits one target (i presume whoever is in the center of the fire) and not multiple. I don’t know if you intended that. If you did that’s fine, but I wanted to let you know.
 

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Okay so, I’m gonna explain what I was going for. Can you help me out with formatting it, please? The basic premise is this; Toothless can shoot fireballs, which travel in a straight line. Similar to a grenade, the fireball explodes when it makes contact with a target or surface. The explosion would be able to deal splash damage which leaves a burn/flame on both the initial target and those within a set area (which is set by Affects Multiple?) that would continue to deal minor damage (hence the Debuff).

Hopefully I’m just being janky in my ability to understand the system and it’s actually an easy fix :|

Edit: admittedly, I may have forgotten to move the modifiers.. the ranged is supposed to affect the fireball itself.. he can fire it away to whatever distance range allows and limited should apply to the whole thing. He can only fire a set amount at a time
 
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That’s definitely not impossible, I’d recommend Triggered even if it gets a bit expensive. Oh, and if the lingering effect is just Damage, you don’t need Debuff. You might try making it like this:

Fire Blast
Damage 1 (100)
-Ranged (50)​
-Triggered - Upon Impact (100)​
-Affects Multiple 2 (100)​
-Ongoing (100)​
-Finite - 10 shots (-50)​
The total for this is 400, but hopefully that makes sense? The Ranged is for being able to shoot the initial projectile at a range, and then the “explosion” is a triggered effect when the projectile hits.

If, in the future, you’d like to add a debuff portion- that perhaps the target would be compelled to put out the fire on themselves, or the burn damage would hinder their physical dexterity or such- feel free to pick that up as a Debuff portion of the ability with the same modifiers down the line.
 

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Oh amazing. yeah, I would never have gotten to that stage myself. Much appreciated for the help with this. I guess it was me being janky :) Also, edited to reflect your proposed format. (Much cleaner than mine :D)
 

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I'm glad Mima was able to help you with this. Just as a final note, you should really put "(Toothless)" after Fire Blast as well, as that is also an Ability which belongs to Toothless. It makes it easier for people looking at your profile to see which Abilities belong to your character and which are your Summon's.
 
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