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Elise

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User name: Elise

Have you read the rules? Yes

Character Name: Elise

Character Source: OC

Starting Location: Mesa Roja

Physical Tendencies:
  • Power(P): 30%
  • Toughness(T): 30%
  • Quickness(Q): 10%
  • Skill(S): 30%
Personality Tendencies:
  • Aggression(A): 30%
  • Cunning(C): 30%
  • Diplomacy(D): 10%
  • Support(S): 30%
Physical Description:

Elise is an interesting young lady. Her dress is extremely punk-gothic, with torn leggings, platform boots, fishnets under halter-tops, fingerless sleeve gloves, occult tattoos, and all the black makeup she can muster. Over all of this billows a long, heavy black cloak with a crushed velvet finish.

She is somewhat short of stature, and stocky to boot, if not outright chubby. There is, however, a hunting, lithe gauntness to her facial features and hands. Her facial structure is somewhat african, and her dark freckles and medium-brown skintone affirm this. On the other hand, her braided auburn hair contradicts it, though she keeps the left half of her skull shaved for extra tattoo space.

If one were to catch her with her hood down (unlikely), they would note her pointed, bat-like ears and smoldering red irises. With her exaggerated canines, Elise's existence as a vampire is not very subtle.

Character History:

Most of Elise's life follows that of any other fairytale wizard. Raised an orphan by a kindly old family, Elise was shipped of to the magocratic academies on Erde Nona when she came of age at twelve. She had no idea what her parentage entailed, or where she originally came from. The only things known about her origins were that she was delivered to her adoptive parents by a sinister man in black as a sickly infant, and that she radiated palpable arcane power.

Her raw magical potential both concerned and astounded her initial instructors, and after about three years of tutelage, the board of instructors secretly decided to slow-track Elise while they decided what to do with her. Naturally, they did not tell young Elise, who began to feel impatient that her potential was being wasted. After several more years, Elise absconded from the magical academies to try and find her way in Erde Nona's more sinister arcane underground. She did excel, at first, but was still in over her head. Eventually, at the age of 20, Elise fell into the 'graces' of a vampire named Julios Restlin. The undead fiend convinced Elise to become his progeny in exchange for magical favor, but this (naturally) turned out simply to be a ploy to acquire her as a thrall.

In testament to Elise's credit, she found complex ritual arcana that allowed her to break Julios' control over her mind, and slay him for his treachery. This, of course, made the prospect of staying on Erde Nona very dangerous. Julios had possessed a wide network of vampiric spies and thugs, who were all now compelled to hunt and kill their master's killer.

So Elise smuggled and charmed her way aboard the first planetary transport she could find, and wound up on Mesa Roja. It's been five years since she was vampirized, and frankly, she can't recommend it. Mesa Roja has, however, provided her with steady (expendable) meals and test-subjects. She's not sure what her next move is, but her aspirant nature has her feeling restless for her next big step...

Abilities/Skills:


Vampiric Physiology

Adaptation: Breathing, Toxins, Disease (300)
— Limited: Sleep in Coffin Only (-50)

Senses 1: Hearing, Smell, Sight (300)
— Ongoing (+100)
— Weakness: Overwhelmed by Garlic (-25)

Endurance 1 (100)
— Side-effect: Damaged by natural moving water (-50)

Agility 1 (200)
— Finite: Diminishes without Feeding (-50)
— Limited: Invited Entry Only (-50)

Healing 2 (400)
— Ongoing (+200)
— Finite: Diminishes without Feeding (-100)
— Side-effect: Burns in Sunlight (-100)
— Weakness: Halted by Staked Heart (-50)

Total Cost: 1,125
Description: Being that she is a young vampire, Elise's unnatural form isn't quite as impressive as some more seasoned specimens. Still, it does give her some edges where it counts. Notably, however come the classic drawbacks of being repelled by garlic, bursting into flames under direct sun, dissolving in natural rivers, etc. Most importantly is the Feeding. Elise needs to eat about as frequently as any other living creature, i.e., at least about 8 oz. of fresh blood per day. Without it, her most potent abilities will vanish, leaving her vulnerable and desperate.


Vampiric Strength
Damage 2 (200)
— Finite: Diminishes without Feeding (-100)

Move Object 2 (200)
— Finite: Diminishes without Feeding (-100)

Total Cost: 200
Description: Elise isn't quite as strong as her peers either, but it still makes her more than a match for hapless thugs in dark alleys. Though she is not a trained fighter, her jabs, punches and kicks fall like blows from a sledgehammer, and she can easily lift (or restrain) grown men for a lethal bite.

Like her body's other stronger abilities, this lethality starts fading if she goes even one day without a blood meal.


Arcane Lance
Damage 3 (300)
— Ranged (+150)
— Finite: Four per Rest (-150)
— Weakness: Magical Barriers (-75)
Total Cost: 225
Description: With a flick of her wrist and the hissing of the magical words 'Sahj Itary Ohs', Elise conjures a long, razor-sharp spear of crystalline energy that gleams red with heat. It coalesces above her head before a flick of her finger sends it hurtling at supersonic speeds towards her target with a terrific crack.

This magical javelin is strong enough to punch through basic armors and impale regular people, but will shatter against reinforced metal. Likewise, magical barriers and shields of any power cause the lance to disintegrate back into fizzling magestuff.

Regardless of whether it causes damage, the lance dissipates a moment after impact. Finally, Elise can only cast this lance four times before needing to refocus her magical reserves for four hours.


Gleaming Ward
Protection 3 (300)
— Affects Multiple 1 (+150)
— Indiscriminate (-150)
— Weakness: Psychic/Soul Abilities (-75)
— Finite: Four per Rest (-150)
Total Cost: 150
Description: By throwing both hands forward and crying the words 'Ta-oo Rhoos', Elise can cause a 20 foot wide magical disc of crackling, glinting, folded space to instantly snap into reality. The circle of protective magic appears directly in front of Elise, but can reasonably protect anyone right next to her or behind her.

The barrier works both ways, however, and allies benefiting from the barrier cannot attack through it towards the abjured threat. Additionally, damaging effects that are psychic or damage the soul itself are not hindered by the gem-like barrier. Elise can cast the Ward four times before needing to refocus her magical energies for four hours.


Ephemeris
Senses 3: Soul Pattern (300)
— Ongoing (+300)
— Triggered (+150)
— Indiscriminate (-150)
— Activation: 30 Seconds (-300)
— Weakness: Unliving (-75)
Total Cost: 225
Description: This niche spell was developed for tracking and analysis. Elise spends a full thirty seconds chanting incantations and tracing a magical circle on the ground, approximately five feet in diameter. Once the circle is ready, the next living (only living) thing that walks into the circle triggers the spell.

The creature that walked into the circle is momentarily shrouded in a burst of silvery-violet magic, which fades like ghostly fire. Until the magic is dispelled or removed, Elise will be able to track that creature's exact location any time they get within 300 feet of her. Furthermore, it gives Elise intimate insight into the target's tendencies, abilities and other statistics, as long as they remain within range of her detection (which she will dutifully record in her grimoire).

Master Skills:

Rituals/Arcana 1

How much Essence did you spend? 1,975

How much Essence do you have left? 25

Were you referred by an existing member? Cyrus, technically.
 
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Hey, good to see you back! Let’s take a look at these abilities...

You can remove the Ongoing +100 from your Vampiric Physiology Adaption effect, since Adaptations are Ongoing by default. I think you understood that, so maybe you can just change it to +0 or something.

Your Agility 1 effect on Vampiric Physiology also doesn’t need Ongoing (it’s that by default).

Endurance is also always Ongoing. Since the price of an Ability can’t go below 50 essence and removing Ongoing reduces the price a ton, you might want to consider shifting around your negative modifiers.

Gleaming Wand, Total Cost should only be 75 and not 175. I did the math on my phone though, so I may be wrong on that.
 

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A couple more things.

We're recommending a format which can make reading Abilities easier, especially for long ones like Vampiric Physiology. This is how it could be written, accounting for every needed change:

Vampiric Physiology (1125)
Adaptation: Breathing, Toxins, Disease (300)
— Limited: Sleep in Coffin Only (-50)

Senses 1: Hearing, Smell, Sight (300)
— Ongoing (+100)
— Weakness: Overwhelmed by Garlic (-25)

Agility 1 (200)
— Finite: Diminishes without Feeding (-50)
— Limited: Invited Entry Only (-50)

Endurance 1 (100)
— Finite: Diminishes without Feeding (-50)
— Side-effect: Damaged by natural moving water (-50)

Healing 2 (400)
— Ongoing (+200)
— Finite: Diminishes without Feeding (-100)
— Side-effect: Burns in Sunlight (-100)
— Weakness: Halted by Staked Heart (-50)

Limited is used for limiting conditions like "if"s and "only"s, so some of the Modifiers here were changed according to that.

Other corrections:
Gleaming Wand costs 150, since the Modifiers bring it down to the minimum cost of 50 per Rank.

Skills actually cost 50 per Rank, so Rituals/Arcana 2 would cost 100 Essence. Unfortunately, this means the Ability/Skill set wouldn't fit under the 2K starting Essence as it is, being 100 Essence over.

This is optional, but it's preferred that Affects Multiple and Activation have their ranks/mode labelled on the Modifier. This makes it easier to tell at a glance the AoE or activation time of the Effect. For example, "Affects Multiple 1 (+50)" for 20 feet AoE and "Activation: 30 seconds (-100)" for a half minute activation time.
 

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Thank you for the corrections. I have edited the roster to reflect them, and slightly reduced the cost of Ephemeris to afford one level of Arcana.
 
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