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Danuje

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User name: powergy

Have you read the rules? Yes

Character Name: Danuje

Character Source: OC

Starting Location: Erde Nona

Physical Tendencies:
  • Power(P): 10%
  • Toughness(T): 10%
  • Quickness(Q): 20%
  • Skill(S): 60%
Due to Danuje's natural gift for tactical thinking, he prefers a strategic approach to physical encounters; as such, he places the highest value on Skill. Quickness is valued above Toughness and Power as it is a more important factor in skillful physical execution.

Personality Tendencies:
  • Aggression(A): 10%
  • Cunning(C): 70%
  • Diplomacy(D): 10%
  • Support(S): 10%
Danuje has a natural talent for tactics and strategic thinking. As such, he has developed this interaction type throughout his life much more than the others; any development in other areas is due to its use in the context of tactical thinking.

Physical Description:

Danuje has curly black hair that is usually disheveled. He is usually seen wearing a black and yellow hoodie given to him by his best friend, symbolizing the importance of their relationship.

He has round eyes and an expressive face. Usually he uses this to his advantage as it makes him look naturally trustworthy or innocent.

He is a little above average height. He is muscular but doesn't have much muscle mass, he is lean.

Character History:

Danuje grew up in a lower-class neighborhood. As such, it was necessary to learn how to defend oneself both physically and mentally growing up, explaining the value he puts into strategic thinking. As he grew older, he became more intelligent and capable, and became successful enough that he was able to move his family and friends to a better area. However, since his wealth is tied to the neighborhood he grew up in, he still spends a lot of time there. He and his friends and family are very well off.

Since, for the most part, Danuje has triumphed over survival, he has found a lot of free time on his hands. He has started thinking about higher and greater purpose. At the same time, partly due to his interest in purpose, and partly due to all the time he has, he has developed an interest in planetary exploration.

Danuje also has a history of seeking out and solving problems that he has found around Arcadia out of pure altruism. This has given him a reputation of being an angel walking on Erde Nona. This has attracted both positive and negative attention, so he has found himself having many allies and enemies (and some allies that are really enemies).

Abilities/Skills:

Telepathy - 100 Essence
Communication 1 (100)

Danuje can communicate telepathically with others. He can either target one person directly, or broadcast thoughts generally to his surroundings; each person who receives the thought can begin direct communication with Danuje.

RapidLearn - 1800 Essence
Mimic 4 (1600)
--Ongoing (400)
--Activation 2 (-400)
--Chaotic (-200)
Debuff 2 (200)
--Ongoing (200)

Danuje has the ability to learn one of his opponent's abilities and he retains use for them until he voluntarily forgets them to make room for others. The ability that's been learned will also become weaker for the opponent. However, it takes about a minute to learn, and when it's used, it can have unpredictable negative effects.


How much Essence did you spend? 1900

How much Essence do you have left? 100

Were you referred by an existing member? No
 
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Ahana Varma

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Heya, welcome to Multerra.
Before we can approve your character, there are just a few minor adjustments needed to your application.

Physical Tendencies:
  • Power(P): 11%
  • Toughness(T): 11%
  • Quickness(Q): 20%
  • Skill(S): 58%
Tendency percentages should always be in multiples of 5, so these will need adjusted slightly. Perhaps to 10%, 10%, 20%, 60%.

Telepathy (Communication - Rank 1): 100
Please add a description to this Ability. I know it might seem obvious how it works, but all Abilities are required to have descriptions.

Also, keep in mind that by default all versions of the Communication Effect are intended to be used to contact others with that Effect. If you want your character's telepathy to work differently from that then you'll need to specify how in the description.

Here is an example of a character who uses telepathy in such a way. It may be helpful to look at if that's what you're wanting to do: https://multerra.zulenka.com/index.php?threads/mewtwo.260/#post-918


RapidLearn: 800 - Danuje has the ability to learn one of his opponent's abilities and use them for a short time. The ability that's been learned will also become weaker for the opponent. However, it takes about a minute to learn, and when it's used, it can have unpredictable negative effects.
  • Mimic - Rank 4: 1200
  • Debuff - Rank 2: 200
  • Negative modifiers
    • Activation: -400
    • Chaotic: -200
Debuff will require the Ongoing Modifier if you want it to last more than a few seconds.

I don't think Mimic requires Ongoing, but the rules don't actually say that it doesn't, so I'll need to double check that with an admin to confirm, then get back to you.

Also, while you are free to format your Abilities however you like, you do need to make it clear which Effects are being Modified. As you have listed your Negative Modifiers beneath the Debuff Effect, I would ordinarily have assumed that was the one being Modified, if not for the fact that the prices seem to be based on the rank of the Mimic Effect. So if you could list them beneath that one instead, that would be the simplest way of clarifying which Effect they modify.

Also, as you are taking the more severe version of the Activation Modifier, please put a 2 after "Activation" in the Effects list, to make this clearer.



P.S. We have a particular format which we've been recommending recently (though it's not yet been added to our rules pages anywhere). While you may prefer to keep to your own style, I'll rewrite your Ability with my corrections in that format to serve as a reference for you:
RapidLearn - 1000 Essence
Mimic 4 (1200)
--Activation 2 (-400)
--Chaotic (-200)
Debuff 2 (200)
--Ongoing (200)

Danuje has the ability to learn one of his opponent's abilities and use them for a short time. The ability that's been learned will also become weaker for the opponent. However, it takes about a minute to learn, and when it's used, it can have unpredictable negative effects.
If you decide that you would prefer the format I've used here then you can just copy and paste the text in the spoiler into your first post in place of the current version of the Ability.
 

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Thanks for doing that.

Unfortunately, after discussing it with the other some other staff members, it seems that you do need to take the Ongoing Modifier on Mimic in order to keep the Effect for an extended period.

It's up to you if you want to add that, but without it you'll only have a few seconds after learning an Ability to use it before forgetting it again.

Comment here again after you've made your decision and, where necessary, edited your first post, and I'll approve your character.
 

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Technically, there's not really an upper limit on the length of an Effect with Ongoing. For example, Variable Creation + Ongoing can allow characters to create permanent objects.

In the case of Mimic, however, you can only ever copy up to the amount of Essence you have available based on the rank of Mimic. So for rank 4 Mimic, he could copy up to 800 Essence worth of Abilities, but if you wanted him to copy anything else after that, he'd need to forget something he'd learned previously.

Also, I've just noticed that there's a bit of an error in your pricing of RapidLearn. You have Mimic at rank 4 but have priced it at 1200, which is actually the cost it would be if it were rank 3, and you've priced its Ongoing Modifier at 200 Essence, which is the price it should be if the Effect it was modifying was rank 2.

Please fix up those prices, and if you want then you can change the description to say that he retains the learned Abilities until he chooses to forget them to make room for others. If you'd prefer to keep it so that his Mimic only lasts for a single fight then you can of course do that, but the limit about how much he can copy will still apply.
 

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You've still got the total cost of RapidLearn as 1400, but it should actually be 1800. Also, your total Essence spent should be 1900 and remaining Essence should be 100.

It looks like that's all that still needs sorted, so if you could just correct those numbers then your character can be approved.
 
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