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User name: Shallan Davar

Have you read the rules? Yes

Character Name: Shallan Davar

Character Source: Stormlight Archive (taking her from about halfway through book 3)

Starting Location: Mesa Roja

Character Behavior:
Shallan is a Frenetic Novice. Her childhood in a deeply disturbed noble family left her with some deep-seated issues that she has struggled to overcome, and only recently has she had the autonomy to begin to discover who she is. While Shallan is a curious scholarly type by nature, her desperation often leads her to take rash actions, adapting to failures more quickly than she makes plans to avoid them. Too often her path has been one of reactions or chosen for her, and she sometimes struggles with actualizing her own goals as a result.

Shallan isn’t a warrior. Despite possessing an incredibly powerful shardblade and being able to use stormlight to heal otherwise mortal injuries, she has no experience on the battlefield, and only rudimentary training from her betrothed Adolin. This lack of training means that her fighting style is decidedly function over form, and she is willing to use somewhat underhanded techniques if they will end the fight quickly. Though a novice swordswoman, she knows that a shardblade is an incredibly dangerous weapon to use without training, so she is hesitant to wield it if she does not need to.

Physical Description:

A young Vedan woman of seventeen, Shallan has long red hair and faded freckles. Her homeland has very strict gender roles, which Shallan has been steadily growing to question as she accumulates experience. However, she still follows Vedan fashion, where women keep their left hand, their “safe hand” covered when in public. If needed she does so with a glove, but the preferred method is a long-sleeved dress; the left sleeve being a longer closed off “pouch” which can also be used for storing valuable things such as her coin. She frequently carries her sketchpad and belongings in an over-the-shoulder satchel.

Character History:

The youngest of five in a mid-tier noble family, Shallan’s youth was quite sheltered, affording her much time for studies, but little experience with the world. Dark events led Shallan to kill both her mother and father, the first in self-defense at a young age, the second to save her brothers years later. She was briefly the ward of Jasnah Kholin one of the foremost minds of the era, where she first began developing her abilities as a Surgebinder, before her mentor’s apparent assassination left Shallan stranded in the wilderness. She developed Veil as a disguise first to avoid being targeted for ransom, but later expanded her usefulness as the more confident commoner personality could achieve things that an anxious young lady of clear nobility could not.

Shallan was instrumental to the Kholin family’s saving the war camps from the arrival of the Everstorm and was the one who both found and activated the portal to the lost city of Urithiru. Now publicly one of the legendary Knights Radiant, Shallan struggled with the expectations of helping solve a world-wide crisis. She created a more idealized version of herself, Brightness Radiant, who she sometimes adopted to help meet those expectations. As time has progressed, Shallan has come to depend on these two personas, and it has become harder and harder to keep them separate from herself. when her mission to the besieged capital city of Kholinar fell into disarray, she and her companions fled to the city's Oathgate, only to find the portal had been trapped when she attempted to activate it, sending her somewhere else entirely, the crossroads.

What starting Affinity does your character have? Gifted

Abilities/Skills:

Illumination
Illusion (sight/hearing) 4 (1000)
-Ongoing (400)
-Limited (blurs and dissolves with distance from Shallan) (-200)
-Finite (requires Stormlight to use) (-200)
Total = 1000 + 400 – 200 – 200 = 1000

As a Lightweaver, one of Shallan’s abilities is to manifest Stormlight as hologram-like illusions. Her preferred use for this ability is as a disguise for herself or others but she can create other small illusions as well. The clarity and definition of her illusions reflects the quality of her mental image when she creates them, to this end she frequently sketches portraits of her intended images, helping her mental image and therefore the illusion to be more lifelike.

Shallan has been able to modify her own voice while using this surge as well as create sounds from other illusions. Though her illusions do not require her direct concentration to maintain, they do dissolve over time without the investment of more stormlight and will begin to blur and breakdown if they get too far from Shallan.

Imaging
Sense (Sight & Supernatural) 5 (1000)
-Concentration (-250)
-Activation (-250)
Total = 1000 – 250 – 250 = 500

By focusing on a scene for a moment and blinking, Shallan is able to take what she calls an “image” of what she sees. Though she does not remember the scene consciously any different from normal, she is later able to draw it with near perfect accuracy. In addition, these drawings will sometimes reveal details that Shallan did not consciously notice at the time, including beings or things that do not exist in the normal world as we see it. She can have multiple images that she has not drawn, but once she draws the image, she would to take another one to draw it again.

Artistic talent

Craft(Sketching) 6 (300)
Craft(Painting) 6 (0)
Craft(Portraiture) 6 (0)
Craft(Scientific Drawings/Annotations) 6 (0)

Shallan is an accomplished artist, rarely without her sketchbook and charcoal. Drawing is a much needed stress relief for Shallan, and she loves nothing better than finding something new and interesting, often doing brief sketches on the spot or taking an “image” for later if she does not have the time at the moment.

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How much Essence do you have left? 200

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Hey! Apologies for the delay.

I think this mostly looks good, but could you clarify in the description of Illumination some more specifics about what exactly stormlight is? As that’s not a mechanic that directly translates to what we use, I’d just love to see some specificity about how much time she can hold this illusion up with a “full tank” of stormlight, what needs to be done to recharge it, etc.

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Okay great! I was 99% sure that the whole stormlight archive magic system would be something that I'd need help workshopping to figure out how it'll fit with this system.

Shallan's home world has regular very intense storms that kind of shape large portions of the world's biology and culture. One of the positives of these storms is that a gemstone that is exposed to a highstorm glows brightly afterwards for quite a while, (like days to weeks depending on the size and structure of the stone in question). This glow is dubbed "stormlight" and used both as a light source and to power several of the magical technologies in the world. As a Surgebinder, Shallan can collect stormlight herself, either from a storm or taking it from a gem that's been storing it. This is what she uses for basically all of her magical powers, from her illusions to her super healing to like essentially matter manipulation (that one'll be fun to translate). its generally used as a soft system in practice, with phrases like "this action drained a lot of stormlight" or "Shallan was running low on stormlight so she breathed in some more from the gems in her pouch". It's somewhat tied into one's breath, but she's maintained disguises for far longer than holding a breath so I'd have to look up some descriptions as to maximum expenditures.

I'm kind of curious whether this would even qualify for the Limited modifier. Its certainly possible for a Surgebinder to run out of stormlight (especially on worlds that don't have as many super storms or a gemstone based economy) but I wouldn't think about it in the same way as like the bullets from a gun are a hard and fast limit on how many times it can shoot.

Regardless of the modifier, the description should at least give a rough understanding of what she's doing beyond just saying "oh it uses stormlight" so I'll be adding some of that. I also might retool the personality description.There's a lot going on with why Shallan acts the way she does, but if I read that personality without knowing who Shallan was I feel like I wouldn't write the character the way she acts.
 

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I for sure think it could qualify for Finite as long as you clarify in the description what that means, like, in world -- so I'd say something about the requirement of a stormy climate, so something to that effect. I may also reach out to a higher up in case they have some better advice, but my big thing is I just wanna like, read the description (of at least this first Stormlight ability, I don't think it needs to be repeated as you make new ones, personally) and get an idea of, like, how she obtains this stormlight and generally how long it lasts/what would make it last longer or shorter.

Because, like, absolutely it seems like an ability that would be more suited to adventures on, like, Kraw or Opealon than on Mesa Roja, for example, and I think that qualifies for *something*? But yeah, if you'll update that description and post it up I'll take a look at it and also have someone else probably give it a once over. It's a really cool concept!
 

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Here's the updated versions for character behavior and abilities. Round two go!

Character Behavior:
Shallan is a Frenetic Novice. Her childhood in a deeply disturbed noble family left her with some deep-seated issues that she has struggled to overcome, and only recently has she had the autonomy to begin to discover who she is. Shallan is a curious scholarly type by nature, with an extremely quick wit and a tendency to blush easily. she is frequently her desperation often leads her to take rash actions, adapting to failures more quickly than she makes plans to avoid them. Too often her path has been one of reactions or chosen for her, and she sometimes struggles with actualizing her own goals as a result.

Shallan isn’t a warrior. Despite possessing an incredibly powerful shardblade and being able to use stormlight to heal otherwise mortal injuries, she has no experience on the battlefield, and only rudimentary training from her betrothed Adolin. This lack of training means that her fighting style is decidedly function over form, and she is willing to use somewhat underhanded techniques if they will end the fight quickly. Though a novice swordswoman, she knows that a shardblade is an incredibly dangerous weapon to use without training, so she is hesitant to wield it if she does not need to.

Abilities/Skills:

Stormlight accumulation: On Shallan's homeworld of Roshar, stormlight is the condensed power of the massive storms that sweep over the world, trapped inside of cut gemstones and used to power a variety of magical technologies. As a surgebinder, Shallan passively collects some stormlight herself from storms, and can utilize this power for a variety of purposes. When she needs more stormlight than she currently has, she can draw in an excess of stormlight from a gemstone holding it within her like holding her breath. The stormlight will drift off her in visible motes, settling back to a normal level if she does not expend the stormlight for some other purpose.
On worlds with less extreme weather (essentially any planet with a more stable climate or rarer weather events) Shallan will have to be sparing with her uses of stormlight abilities, else she may deplete her stores and be unable to use any of her abilities that require stormlight

Illumination
Illusion (sight/hearing) 4 (1000)
-Ongoing (400)
-Limited (blurs and dissolves with distance from Shallan) (-200)
-Finite (requires Stormlight to use) (-200)
Total = 1000 + 400 – 200 – 200 = 1000

As a Lightweaver, one of Shallan’s abilities is to manifest Stormlight as hologram-like illusions. Her preferred use for this ability is as a disguise for herself or others but she can create other small illusions as well. The clarity and definition of her illusions reflects the quality of her mental image when she creates them, to this end she frequently sketches portraits of her intended images, helping her mental image and therefore the illusion to be more lifelike.

Shallan has been able to modify her own voice while using this surge as well as create sounds from other illusions. Though her illusions do not require her direct concentration to maintain, they do dissolve over time without the investment of more stormlight and will begin to blur and breakdown if they get too far from Shallan. the longer an illusion is maintained the more stormlight it will require, and Shallan has not been able to maintain any illusions for more than a few hours without them breaking down.

Imaging
Sense (Sight & Supernatural) 5 (1000)
-Concentration (-250)
-Activation (-250)
Total = 1000 – 250 – 250 = 500

By focusing on a scene for a moment and blinking, Shallan is able to take what she calls an “image” of what she sees. Though she does not remember the scene consciously any different from normal, she is later able to draw it with near perfect accuracy. In addition, these drawings will sometimes reveal details that Shallan did not consciously notice at the time, including beings or things that do not exist in the normal world as we see it. She can have multiple images that she has not drawn, but once she draws the image, she would to take another one to draw it again.

Artistic talent

Craft(Sketching) 6 (300)
Craft(Painting) 6 (0)
Craft(Portraiture) 6 (0)
Craft(Scientific Drawings/Annotations) 6 (0)

Shallan is an accomplished artist, rarely without her sketchbook and charcoal. Drawing is a much needed stress relief for Shallan, and she loves nothing better than finding something new and interesting, often doing brief sketches on the spot or taking an “image” for later if she does not have the time at the moment.

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How much Essence do you have left? 200
 

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Hi hi hi!

So, before getting into this, I wanted to say I am *so* apologetic for the delay -- fully my bad, life kinda exploded and my brain didn't work for a few days there, so my sincerest apologies. I've got some feedback to throw your way courtesy of me and Jade who I checked in with about this just because it's so unique, so please feel free to pester me relentlessly to check in on it after you've worked through that. Once again, my deepest apologies.

Imaging is pretty fine - just specify how long it takes to activate and that's good to go.

Illumination:
- This doesn't necessarily need to the Limited modifier; it's just an Ability that doesn't have Ranged, like a close quarters attack. It does, however, need Self/Other if Shallan can create the illusion on someone else. If she can do it to herself and someone else simultaneously, it'll need Affects Multiple.
- So, we aren't totally sure this qualifies for Finite; there's certainly a way to qualify it with Stormlight, but a few hours is a bit long to qualify for finite. To quote Jade's feedback, if Shallan had to recharge like every thirty minutes, that would be more in line with what Finite is talking about. That being said, I do have a much better grasp over what Stormlight is now, so really you just gotta decide if you wanna shrink the time to qualify for Finite or keep it as is.

That's all! Once again, please @ the f*ck out of me when you're done, so I can be more on top of giving you your feedback, and one more time, very sorry for the wait.
 

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Alright, so I believe that with the changes I won't have enough essence at the start for Illumination, Illusions be expensive yo!
I'll make the changes for it and get it approved here if that's cool, and then just not purchase it until later when I have enough essence (if it's better for me to just put it ability approval later on that's cool too)
what are your thoughts on adding Ranged to it along with the limit? Shallan can maintain an illusion from a larger distance than 10 feet, (like she could easily create an illusion from across a room or like across the street) the blurring is more the idea that she can't make an illusion and like leave it behind or something.

Anywho, attempt the third!

User name: Shallan Davar

Have you read the rules? Yes

Character Name: Shallan Davar

Character Source: Stormlight Archive (taking her from about halfway through book 3)

Starting Location: Mesa Roja

Character Behavior:
Shallan is a Frenetic Novice. Her childhood in a deeply disturbed noble family left her with some deep-seated issues that she has struggled to overcome, and only recently has she had the autonomy to begin to discover who she is. Shallan is a curious scholarly type by nature, with an extremely quick wit and a tendency to blush easily. she is frequently her desperation often leads her to take rash actions, adapting to failures more quickly than she makes plans to avoid them. Too often her path has been one of reactions or chosen for her, and she sometimes struggles with actualizing her own goals as a result.

Shallan isn’t a warrior. Despite possessing an incredibly powerful shardblade and being able to use stormlight to heal otherwise mortal injuries, she has no experience on the battlefield, and only rudimentary training from her betrothed Adolin. This lack of training means that her fighting style is decidedly function over form, and she is willing to use somewhat underhanded techniques if they will end the fight quickly. Though a novice swordswoman, she knows that a shardblade is an incredibly dangerous weapon to use without training, so she is hesitant to wield it if she does not need to.

Physical Description:

A young Vedan woman of seventeen, Shallan has long red hair and faded freckles. Her homeland has very strict gender roles, which Shallan has been steadily growing to question as she accumulates experience. However, she still follows Vedan fashion, where women keep their left hand, their “safe hand” covered when in public. If needed she does so with a glove, but the preferred method is a long-sleeved dress; the left sleeve being a longer closed off “pouch” which can also be used for storing valuable things such as her coin. She frequently carries her sketchpad and belongings in an over-the-shoulder satchel.

Character History:

The youngest of five in a mid-tier noble family, Shallan’s youth was quite sheltered, affording her much time for studies, but little experience with the world. Dark events led Shallan to kill both her mother and father, the first in self-defense at a young age, the second to save her brothers years later. She was briefly the ward of Jasnah Kholin one of the foremost minds of the era, where she first began developing her abilities as a Surgebinder, before her mentor’s apparent assassination left Shallan stranded in the wilderness. She developed Veil as a disguise first to avoid being targeted for ransom, but later expanded her usefulness as the more confident commoner personality could achieve things that an anxious young lady of clear nobility could not.

Shallan was instrumental to the Kholin family’s saving the war camps from the arrival of the Everstorm and was the one who both found and activated the portal to the lost city of Urithiru. Now publicly one of the legendary Knights Radiant, Shallan struggled with the expectations of helping solve a world-wide crisis. She created a more idealized version of herself, Brightness Radiant, who she sometimes adopted to help meet those expectations. As time has progressed, Shallan has come to depend on these two personas, and it has become harder and harder to keep them separate from herself. when her mission to the besieged capital city of Kholinar fell into disarray, she and her companions fled to the city's Oathgate, only to find the portal had been trapped. When she attempted to activate it, she was sent somewhere else entirely, the crossroads.

What starting Affinity does your character have? Gifted

Abilities/Skills:

Stormlight accumulation:
On Shallan's homeworld of Roshar, stormlight is the condensed power of the massive storms that sweep over the world, trapped inside of cut gemstones and used to power a variety of magical technologies. As a surgebinder, Shallan passively collects some stormlight herself from storms, and can utilize this power for a variety of purposes. When she needs more stormlight than she currently has, she can draw in an excess of stormlight from a gemstone holding it within her like holding her breath. The stormlight will drift off her in visible motes, settling back to a normal level if she does not expend the stormlight for some other purpose.
On worlds with less extreme weather (essentially any planet with a more stable climate or rarer weather events) Shallan will have to be sparing with her uses of stormlight abilities, else she may deplete her stores and be unable to use any of her abilities that require stormlight.

Imaging
Sense (Sight & Supernatural) 5 (1000)
-Concentration (-250)
-Activation (-250)
Total = 1000 – 250 – 250 = 500

By focusing on a scene for a moment and blinking, Shallan is able to take what she calls an “image” of what she sees. Though she does not remember the scene consciously any different from normal, she is later able to draw it with near perfect accuracy. In addition, these drawings will sometimes reveal details that Shallan did not consciously notice at the time, including beings or things that do not exist in the normal world as we see it. She can have multiple images that she has not drawn, but once she draws the image, she would to take another one to draw it again.

Artistic talent

Craft(Sketching) 6 (300)
Craft(Painting) 6 (0)
Craft(Portraiture) 6 (0)
Craft(Scientific Drawings/Annotations) 6 (0)

Shallan is an accomplished artist, rarely without her sketchbook and charcoal. Drawing is a much needed stress relief for Shallan, and she loves nothing better than finding something new and interesting, often doing brief sketches on the spot or taking an “image” for later if she does not have the time at the moment.

How much Essence did you spend? 800

How much Essence do you have left? 1200

Were you referred by an existing member? I am secretly Roy Mustang, Shhhh don't tell anyone

Illumination
Illusion (sight/hearing) 4 (1000)
-Ongoing (400)
-Affects Multiple (200)
-Ranged(200)
-Limited (blurs and dissolves with distance from Shallan) (-200)
Total = 1000 + 400 + 200 + 200 - 200 = 1600

As a Lightweaver, one of Shallan’s abilities is to manifest Stormlight as hologram-like illusions. Her preferred use for this ability is as a disguise for herself or others but she can create other small illusions as well. The clarity and definition of her illusions reflects the quality of her mental image when she creates them, to this end she frequently sketches portraits of her intended images, helping her mental image and therefore the illusion to be more lifelike.

Shallan has been able to modify her own voice while using this surge as well as create sounds from other illusions. Should someone attempt to touch an illusion it will swirl like mist Though her illusions do not require her direct concentration to maintain, they do dissolve over time without the investment of more stormlight and will begin to blur and breakdown if they get too far from Shallan.
 

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This looks almost perfect to me! One quick thing:

1. Make sure to state in the description of Imaging how long the activation is, approximately (I get that, like, she's painting it, but gimme a ballpark of how long it takes her to paint it)

That said, this is fantastic and you're basically approved and good to go. Just add in the timing thing to your description and happy writing! Thanks for your patience and hard work, pal.
 
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