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User name: Ash

Have you read the rules? Yes

Character Name: Nishana Hoss

Character Source: Star Wars OC

Starting Location: Govermorne

Physical Tendencies:
Power(P): 40%
Toughness(T): 20%
Quickness(Q): 10%
Skill(S): 30%

Personality Tendencies:
Aggression(A): 45%
Cunning(C): 25%
Diplomacy(D): 15%
Support(S): 15%

Physical Description:

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Character History:

Born some twenty years before the Sacking of Coruscant into a diminutive clan of Mandalorians, Nishana was the daughter of the Clan’s head, Galaar Hoss and his wife Alys. From an early age, Galaar instilled his sense of pride and honor into his daughter. She was taught the heritage of the Mandalorians, often told stories of Mandalore — the Sole Ruler of the Mandalorians — in place of bedtime stories. Nishana was trained in combat from a very young age, perhaps too young; she was proficient with a Blaster Pistol by the age of 8. Her formative years were non eventful, years upon years of combat training from her father, much to her mother’s despair.

It wasn’t until her fifteenth birthday that anything of note occured. A roving, “rival” clan of Mandalorians had grown tired of Galaar’s perceived complacency. He was believed to be squandering his clan’s abilities. This rival clan were of a far more war mongering mindset, take what they could and give nothing back.

The rival clan amassed their forces and struck Hoss’ clan in the dead of night, catching them unawares. The vast majority of the clan was wiped out before they could even react; Galaar and Alys taken hostage and forced to watch on as their clan mates were slaughtered like animals. The few that survived were assimilated into the rival clan’s ranks, bolstering their numbers and combat prowess. Nishana, daughter of the fallen clan’s head, was treated with scorn; never an equal.

Another five years of roving and pillaging passed, Nishana’s new clan roamed further and further away from the Outer Rim until the Sith Empire resurged. The Mandalorians were approached, the Sith eager to have the aid of the galaxy’s most infamous mercenaries and bounty hunters. Most refused the offer, Nishana’s clan amongst those. Until the Sith engineered a cause for the Mandalorian’s support. A rallying cry was sent out, a new Mandalore — later known pejoratively as Mandalore the Lesser — was appointed. The new Mandalore led the Mandalorian’s, alongside the Sith; their orders were to blockade the Hydian Way. Nishana, however, sought an out. She acquired a ship, through less than savoury means, and piggybacked the Sith’s rampage to Coruscant. She quickly renounced all ties with her clan and took up residence in the Galactic City, her combat prowess paving the way for her source of income and a living; Bounty hunting and mercenary work, something that Mandalorian’s had become renowned for.

A particularly lucrative opportunity saw Nishana leaving Coruscant briefly to track down a particularly zealous Republic Commando. However, upon jumping to hyperspace, a wrong turn took the Bounty Hunter far from the Galaxy she once knew.

Abilities/Skills:

“Tritanium Asylum”
Effect: Protection 1 [100]
Modifier: Ongoing [100]
Cost: 200 Essence
Descriptor: Nishana’s adapted version of Mandalorian Armor.


“Jetpack”
Effect: Flying (Rank 1) [200]
Modifier: Ongoing [100]; Modifier: Limited [-50]
Cost: 250 Essence
The Tritanium Asylum armor comes equipped with a jetpack, allowing Nishana to fly. She is only able to do so whilst wearing the armor.


“T-6 Thunderer”
Effect: Damage 1 [100]
Modifier: Removable [-50]; Modifier: Ranged [50]
Cost: 100 Essence
Descriptor: The T-6 "Thunderer"; a heavy blaster pistol manufactured by BlasTech Industries in response to the creation of the Renegade heavy blaster pistol by the SoroSuub Corporation. The "Thunderer" was created with the sole purpose of surpassing its rivals in pure power, and allowed BlasTech to claim the title "king of the blaster wars".

Master Skill: Piloting (Spacecraft - 300)
Perk - Transit Discount - Nishana's line of work takes her off world frequently. As such she managed to wrangle a deal with whatever authorities oversee transit between worlds, this deal lies heavily in her favour, of course.

I’m a little shaky with the ability building, so bear with me pls!

How much Essence did you spend? 850

How much Essence do you have left? 650
 
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Great work!!

The only thing I'd say is that the Limited on Jetpack is a little wonky. Unless other people have the ability to control whether or not she's wearing armor, it's prety much that you have it available on demand. In order to qualify for limited, it must be unavailable throughout the course of a normal scene about half the time.

You may want to rank up these Effects so they more accurately reflect what you're trying to depict, because right now they're super underpowered versions. The T-6 should be at about Damage 5 if it's a very very impressive Blaster, for example, your Jetpack only lets you move at 20mph and your armor is only strong enough to deflect a knife attack.

It's TOTALLY COOL if you wanna say this equipment is malfunctioning or whatever to explain why it's all super weak, but with all that extra Essence to spare, you could totally bump some of these up. You can also start low and jsut pay the difference to upgrade things!

That said, you've successfully used Modifiers correctly! In order to upgrade the ranks of these Abilities, you'd jsut take the total cost you have for Rank 1 and multiply it by what the total desired rank is. For example, your T-6 is 100 Essence per Rank, so if you wanted to make it a rank 5, you'd multiply it by 5.

100 x 4 = 500

A narratively accurate T-6 blaster would cost you 500 Essence.

The same thing can be done for your other Effects! You can feel free ot PM me on discord or ask questions in our Abilities channel if you need some help with anything :D
 

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Oh, cool, okay. I thought I read that abilities were ranked based on your level, but that may have been a little while ago. I'll rank some bits up now and post/edit the changes in!

What's a suitable resolution for the Jetpack, then? Just remove the limited modifier?

*edit* throwing these changes in. Gonna ask to get my username changed to Nishana at some point as well, for reference.

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User name: Ash

Have you read the rules? Yes

Character Name: Nishana Hoss

Character Source: Star Wars OC

Starting Location: Govermorne

Physical Tendencies:
Power(P): 40%
Toughness(T): 20%
Quickness(Q): 10%
Skill(S): 30%

Personality Tendencies:
Aggression(A): 45%
Cunning(C): 25%
Diplomacy(D): 15%
Support(S): 15%

Physical Description:
250




Character History:

Born some twenty years before the Sacking of Coruscant into a diminutive clan of Mandalorians, Nishana was the daughter of the Clan’s head, Galaar Hoss and his wife Alys. From an early age, Galaar instilled his sense of pride and honor into his daughter. She was taught the heritage of the Mandalorians, often told stories of Mandalore — the Sole Ruler of the Mandalorians — in place of bedtime stories. Nishana was trained in combat from a very young age, perhaps too young; she was proficient with a Blaster Pistol by the age of 8. Her formative years were non eventful, years upon years of combat training from her father, much to her mother’s despair.

It wasn’t until her fifteenth birthday that anything of note occured. A roving, “rival” clan of Mandalorians had grown tired of Galaar’s perceived complacency. He was believed to be squandering his clan’s abilities. This rival clan were of a far more war mongering mindset, take what they could and give nothing back.

The rival clan amassed their forces and struck Hoss’ clan in the dead of night, catching them unawares. The vast majority of the clan was wiped out before they could even react; Galaar and Alys taken hostage and forced to watch on as their clan mates were slaughtered like animals. The few that survived were assimilated into the rival clan’s ranks, bolstering their numbers and combat prowess. Nishana, daughter of the fallen clan’s head, was treated with scorn; never an equal.

Another five years of roving and pillaging passed, Nishana’s new clan roamed further and further away from the Outer Rim until the Sith Empire resurged. The Mandalorians were approached, the Sith eager to have the aid of the galaxy’s most infamous mercenaries and bounty hunters. Most refused the offer, Nishana’s clan amongst those. Until the Sith engineered a cause for the Mandalorian’s support. A rallying cry was sent out, a new Mandalore — later known pejoratively as Mandalore the Lesser — was appointed. The new Mandalore led the Mandalorian’s, alongside the Sith; their orders were to blockade the Hydian Way. Nishana, however, sought an out. She acquired a ship, through less than savoury means, and piggybacked the Sith’s rampage to Coruscant. She quickly renounced all ties with her clan and took up residence in the Galactic City, her combat prowess paving the way for her source of income and a living; Bounty hunting and mercenary work, something that Mandalorian’s had become renowned for.

A particularly lucrative opportunity saw Nishana leaving Coruscant briefly to track down a particularly zealous Republic Commando. However, upon jumping to hyperspace, a wrong turn took the Bounty Hunter far from the Galaxy she once knew.

Abilities/Skills:

“Tritanium Asylum”
Effect: Protection 3 [300]
Modifier: Ongoing [100]
Cost: 400 Essence
Descriptor: Nishana’s adapted version of Mandalorian Armor.


“Jetpack”
Effect: Flying (Rank 2) [400]
Modifier: Ongoing [100]
Cost: 500 Essence
The Tritanium Asylum armor comes equipped with a jetpack, allowing Nishana to fly. She is only able to do so whilst wearing the armor.


“T-6 Thunderer”
Effect: Damage 3 [300]
Modifier: Removable [-50]; Modifier: Ranged [50]
Cost: 300 Essence
Descriptor: The T-6 "Thunderer"; a heavy blaster pistol manufactured by BlasTech Industries in response to the creation of the Renegade heavy blaster pistol by the SoroSuub Corporation. The "Thunderer" was created with the sole purpose of surpassing its rivals in pure power, and allowed BlasTech to claim the title "king of the blaster wars".

Master Skill: Piloting (Spacecraft - 300)
Perk - Transit Discount - Nishana's line of work takes her off world frequently. As such she managed to wrangle a deal with whatever authorities oversee transit between worlds, this deal lies heavily in her favour, of course.

How much Essence did you spend? 1500

How much Essence do you have left? 0
 
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