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Ripper

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Username: PhoenixRising

Have you read the rules? Yes

Character Name: Ripper

Character Source: OC

Starting Location: Kraw

Character Behavior:
Predatory Slasher
Predatory in the sense that she views everything through a predators lense, people are either prey, threats or on rare occasions allies. She is also very survivalist , and will often act on what would be the best chance at survival. She often goes through combat by ripping and tearing her foes apart.

Physical Description:

Ripper has two forms - her predator form and her human form. Her human is always mysteriously clothed every tine she transforms back and forth. Her predator form is similar to that of a dinosaur, a raptor specifically. Her human form is that of a dark-haired young woman.

Character History:

Created by scientists (No surprise there) Ripper was a test subject and made for zookeepers to gawk at. Until one day a meteor crashed down on earth giving select animals human form and intelligence. She was one of those animals. After a series of misadventures she was eventually transported to the crossroads.

What starting Affinity does your character have? Formidable

Abilities/Skills:

Shifter: Ability - She can shift between human and predator with relative ease. Ripper can shapeshift between her natural predatory form of a raptor to a more suitable humanoid form, often used to communicate with humanoid species and to walk among them without being caught. She is weaker in this form though. Limited. Associated with Shapeshifting. 1000 essence cost.

How much Essence did you spend? 1000 essence

How much Essence do you have left? 1000

Were you referred by an existing member? dark

What is your Discord name?
PolikShadowbliss#8974
 
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Hello Polik! I'll be reviewing your app today. There's a few problems with your joining app we'll have to go over before I can get you approved!

Character Behavior:

When it comes to character behavior, The two word descriptor is specifically sectioned. the first word should relate to your character's behavior in general, while the second is meant to relate to your characters combat style - how they approach fights and act in them

Character History:
This is pretty close to fine, but specify if she was made in the crossroads, on one of the planets in the system, and if so where, or if she is from somewhere else entirely. if the latter, please just make a note of 'and then she was transported to the crossroads.'

Character abilities:
Please read through the sections in multerras rules regarding abilities and effects - as written these do not fit into how Multerras abilities need to be written up. you can find the rules section in the top left of the site's navigations bar, between 'forums' and 'forms', or here, at this link:
Table of Contents | Multerra - A Play by Post RPG (zulenka.com)
With the relevant things to check being 'character growth and currency', 'abilities and effects' and 'master skills and affinities'
 

Ripper

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Hello Polik! I'll be reviewing your app today. There's a few problems with your joining app we'll have to go over before I can get you approved!

Character Behavior:

When it comes to character behavior, The two word descriptor is specifically sectioned. the first word should relate to your character's behavior in general, while the second is meant to relate to your characters combat style - how they approach fights and act in them

Character History:
This is pretty close to fine, but specify if she was made in the crossroads, on one of the planets in the system, and if so where, or if she is from somewhere else entirely. if the latter, please just make a note of 'and then she was transported to the crossroads.'

Character abilities:
Please read through the sections in multerras rules regarding abilities and effects - as written these do not fit into how Multerras abilities need to be written up. you can find the rules section in the top left of the site's navigations bar, between 'forums' and 'forms', or here, at this link:
Table of Contents | Multerra - A Play by Post RPG (zulenka.com)
With the relevant things to check being 'character growth and currency', 'abilities and effects' and 'master skills and affinities'
Changed a few stuff. I’m going to stick with just Shapeshifting for now and upgrade her gradually!
 

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Hey there! I’ve just got a few notes for you ability, thank you for making the changes requested by my fellow staffer!

My main point is about how the Ability is written. If you could write your abilities following a format such as I’ve written below, that would be great! It’s not too big of a deal, but it does make understanding what an ability does much easier at a glance. Here it is:

Shifter: Ability
Shapeshifting (1500E)
—Limited (Only one other form, -500E)
Total Cost: 1000E

She can shift between human and predator with relative ease. Ripper can shapeshift between her natural predatory form of a raptor to a more suitable humanoid form, often used to communicate with humanoid species and to walk among them without being caught. She is weaker in this form though.

Aside from that, you’re good to go! Once you’ve copy and pasted your character information into the Character Profiles section of our forum, feel free to begin writing on your chosen world. Welcome to Multerra!

I’ll also be changing your username to Ripper, since on this forum we use our character names for our account handles. If you would prefer a different name for your character account, let me know!
 
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